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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree? v.6

Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 6
It is argued that libraries are unnecessary these days due to the fact that students have easy access to information via the internet. I disagree with this because libraries allow people to attain specialised types of information and are important for students to study in a quiet environment. Even though it is true that students find it much easier to get specific academic information connected to their studies on the internet, I think that libraries are still essential in schools and universities as well as public library facilities. One reason for this is that some types of specialised information cannot be found on the internet. For instance, most well-known academic authors do not immediately publish their recent work online, instead, they publish books explaining their analyses and results. Therefore, these books are usually found in university or school libraries before they appear on the world wide web. Another reason why I believe that they are necessary is that students need places to concentrate and focus. Libraries are perfect environments for this as they are very quiet and everyone there is motivated to investigate and study. As a result, they create an academic environment that encourages deep concentration. Too illustrate this, a research carried out by University of British Columbia in 2009 stated that students were more preferred studying in the libraries instead of working at home alone. They claimed that a silent academic atmosphere helped them to study and get better results in their exams. In conclusion, although the internet is of great benefit to students, I believe that libraries are still necessary as they grant access to specialised sources of information and their facilities provide better conditions for studying.
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is argued
that libraries are unnecessary these days due to the fact that
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students
have easy access to
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information
via the internet. I disagree with this
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because
libraries
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allow
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people
to attain
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specialised
types of
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information
and are
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important
for
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students
to
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study
in a quiet environment.

Even though
it is true that
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students
find it much easier to
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get
specific
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academic
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information
connected to their
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studies
on the internet, I
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think
that libraries are
still
essential in schools and universities
as well
as public library facilities. One reason for this is that
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some
types of
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specialised
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information
cannot
be found
on the internet.
For instance
, most well-known
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academic
authors do not immediately publish their recent work online,
instead
, they publish books explaining their analyses and results.
Therefore
, these books are
usually
found in university or school libraries
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before
they appear on the
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world wide web
.

Another reason why I believe that they are necessary is that
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students
need places to concentrate and focus. Libraries are perfect environments for this as they are
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very
quiet and everyone there
is motivated
to investigate and
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study
.
As a result
, they create an
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academic
environment that encourages deep concentration.
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Too illustrate
this,
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a research
carried out by University of British Columbia in 2009 stated that
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students
were more preferred studying in the libraries
instead
of working at home alone. They claimed that a silent
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academic
atmosphere
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helped
them to
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study
and
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get
better results in their exams.

In conclusion
, although the internet is of great benefit to
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students
, I believe that libraries are
still
necessary as they grant access to
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specialised
sources of
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information
and their facilities provide better conditions for studying.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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