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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree? v.2

Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 2
In todays' world education plays a significant role in our lives. A part of society will respect the educated person more rather than an uneducated. Education is very important for every individual so that, schools and colleges should focus more on the academics with numerous ways of teaching. On the other hand, general skills such as making food and dressing are also important to lead the mundane life. According to me, academics with general skills is preferable. The subsequent paragraphs will give a better insight into this topic. In order to test the knowledge of a student, colleges and school conduct exams for every particular period of time. The student will improve more by facing these exams. To achieve the triumph in these exams, management should teach in a proper manner. Procuring practical knowledge helps in numerous ways to understand the topics and lessons. For example, one my cousin who invests most of his time on practical approach, made his own alarm clock. In addition to this, management should help students to procure practical knowledge by conducting some assignments and by arranging labs. This paves the way to achieve triumph, for every student not only to pass the exams, but also to apply it in daily life. On the contrary, certain individuals believe that only academics are crucial in student life. Along with these some general skills also plays a significant role. Cooking and dressing are fundamentals in our life, these are essential to lead the prosaic life. Many of the multinational companies focus on the way of dressing, as it shows the professionally. Not only way of dressing and cooking, but also some other basic things we do in our daily life ease to lead the life. Overall, education is necessary to triumph in life. Nowadays, due to heavy competition, management should encourage a practical wayway of approach and it would be an appropriate to face the competitive world. Along with these, some general skills such as cooking and dressing will ease our lives. However, these are learnt in our daily life, these can't' be taught by the management of schools and colleges, we have to learn from our own.
In
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todays
' world education plays a significant role in our
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lives
. A part of society will respect the educated person more
rather
than
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an uneducated
. Education is
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very
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important
for every individual
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so
that, schools and colleges should focus more on the academics with numerous
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ways
of teaching.
On the other hand
, general
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skills
such as making food and
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dressing
are
also
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important
to lead the mundane
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life
.
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According to me
, academics with general
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skills
is preferable. The subsequent paragraphs will give a better insight into this topic.

In order to
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test
the knowledge of a
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student
, colleges and school conduct exams for every particular period of time. The
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student
will
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improve
more by facing these exams. To achieve the triumph in these exams,
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management
should teach
Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with the adverb for "proper"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a proper manner
. Procuring
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practical
knowledge
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helps
in numerous
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ways
to understand the topics and lessons.
For example
, one my cousin who invests most of his time on
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practical
approach, made his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
alarm clock.
In addition
to this,
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management
should
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help
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students
to procure
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practical
knowledge by conducting
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some
assignments and by arranging labs. This paves the
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way
to achieve triumph, for every
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student
not
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only
to pass the exams,
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but
also
to apply it in daily life.

On the contrary
, certain individuals believe that
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only
academics are crucial in
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student
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life
. Along with these
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some
general
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skills
also
plays a significant role. Cooking and
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dressing
are fundamentals in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
, these are essential to lead the prosaic
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life
.
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Many
of the multinational
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companies
focus on the
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way
of
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dressing
, as it
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shows
the
professionally
. Not
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only
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way
of
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dressing
and cooking,
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but
also
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some
other basic things we do in our daily
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life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
to lead the life.

Overall
, education is necessary to triumph in
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life
. Nowadays, due to heavy competition,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
management
should encourage a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
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wayway
of approach and it would be an appropriate to face the competitive world. Along with these,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
general
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
such as cooking and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dressing
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
However
, these are
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learnt
in our daily
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life
,
Did you mean "this can" or "these cans"?
these can
't'
be taught
by the
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management
of schools and colleges, we
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have to
learn from our
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own
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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