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students in high school should learn by sitting there listening to the teacher while taking the notes or communicating and sharing ideas with classes. which one is better? v.2

students in high school should learn by sitting there listening to the teacher while taking the notes or communicating and sharing ideas with classes. which one is better? v. 2
The question is that students in high school should learn by sitting there listening to the teacher while taking the notes or communicating and sharing ideas with classes. Everyone with regard to his personality and his private viewpoint can maintain a specific direction toward this statement; however I am inclined to affirm that the second way can be a useful selection. Participating in the discussions of class can provide some advantages for students in their current and future life. My arguments and reasons are listed below which strengthen my point of view: To begin with, it is axiomatic that sitting and taking note continuously can be tedious for everyone; hence a worthwhile solution for avoiding from this circumstance is that teachers require students to be active in the class. A teacher should not forget that when students with different backgrounds share their opinions, spontaneously the level of knowledge will be raised up in the class. Such a condition will cause students to affect on each other’s ideas; as a result the creative and objective ideas will be formed. The second reason why I advocate from communicating students in a class with each other lies in the fact interpersonal skills. This approach can improve the students' personality. For instance, the shy students can use this opportunity for optimizing their character and overcoming on their fears; consequently the self-confidence feeling will be reinforced in them. Also speaking in the class helps students to make new friends for themselves. Moreover, there is a bit of different point here. When teachers allow students to participate in the discussions, the competition can enter to the scene. Nobody could overlook this fact that the competition plays a crucial role in obtaining prosperity; subsequently the students will do more efforts for attracting their teachers or at least showing off. By taking all above mentioned arguments this conclusion could be drawn that participation and Cooperation provides an advantageous bed for both of the students and teachers. Broadening knowledge base, gaining self-confidence feeling and creating competition among students are some achievements in this way.
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in high school should learn by sitting there listening to the
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teacher
while taking the notes or communicating and sharing
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ideas
with
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classes
. Everyone with regard to his personality and his private viewpoint can maintain a specific direction toward this statement;
however
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am inclined
to affirm that the second way can be a useful selection. Participating in the discussions of
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class
can provide
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some
advantages for
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students
in their
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current
and future life. My arguments and reasons
are listed
below which strengthen my point of view:

To
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begin
with, it is axiomatic that sitting and taking note
continuously
can be tedious for everyone;
hence
a worthwhile solution for avoiding from this circumstance is that
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teachers
require
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students
to be active in the
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class
. A
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teacher
should not forget that when
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students
with
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different
backgrounds share their opinions,
spontaneously
the level of knowledge will
be raised
up in the
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class
. Such a condition will cause
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students
to
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affect
on each other’s
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ideas
;
as a result
the creative and objective
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ideas
will
be formed
.

The second reason why I advocate from communicating
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students
in a
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class
with each other lies in the fact interpersonal
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skills
. This approach can
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improve
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For instance
, the shy
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students
can
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use
this opportunity for optimizing their character and overcoming on their fears;
consequently
the self-confidence feeling will
be reinforced
in them.
Also
speaking in the
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class
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helps
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students
to
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make
new friends for themselves.

Moreover
, there is a bit of
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different
point here. When
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teachers
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allow
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students
to participate in the discussions, the competition can enter to the scene. Nobody could overlook this fact that the competition plays a crucial role in obtaining prosperity;
subsequently
the
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students
will do more efforts for attracting their
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teachers
or at least showing off.

By taking all above mentioned arguments this conclusion could
be drawn
that participation and

Cooperation provides an advantageous bed for both of the
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students
and
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teachers
. Broadening knowledge base, gaining self-confidence feeling and creating competition among
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are
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some
achievements in this way.
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20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay students in high school should learn by sitting there listening to the teacher while taking the notes or communicating and sharing ideas with classes. which one is better? v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
345 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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