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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree v.3

Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. v. 3
People can access multifarious products either from foreign countries or domestic one in these days due to the massive development of international trade. A group of people believes that shops should hold most of the products from locally produced rather than imported for the overall benefit of a country. In my perspective, this could be feasible only to some extent owing to various reasons which would be elucidated in the following paragraphs. Local farmers would be benefited enormously if the shop owners willing to accommodate most of their products which are cultivated without using pesticides or fertilizers. Consequently, the economic development of the particular society would be far more enhanced along with a rising standard of living of the people who belong to agriculture by the way of receiving regular earnings towards their products. Despite this, consumers are willing to use more local products because there are no other substitutes available in the market. Hence, they have not envisaged major health problems in the future. Although they could not get a massive collection of goods, the quality of the products has never been compromised. However, people are always preferred a plethora of substitutes for a single item, then only they can analyse the quality and gratification of each one. This would possible only with the assistance of international trade, which allows a myriad of goods from different parts of the country in a supermarket. Even the lower income people can purchase the products, which are often consumed by affluent people, price is variable based on the cost of ingredients and the goodwill of the specified brand among the public. Overwhelmingly, the bonding between different countries would increase by the way of exporting goods. This cordial relationship with foreign countries definitely assists when one has ended up with any financial losses or natural disasters. Furthermore, a large collection of goods would satisfy the various needs of the public and the shopkeeper as well. To sum up, even though society would benefit if the shops accommodate local products irrespective of the products from other countries, I believe that international trade should be promoted for satisfying multifarious needs of people and also ease major issues of a country.
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People
can access multifarious
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products
either from foreign
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countries
or domestic one in these days due to the massive development of international trade. A group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believes that shops should hold most of the
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products
from
locally
produced
rather
than imported for the
overall
benefit of a
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country
. In my perspective, this could be feasible
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only
to
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some
extent owing to various reasons which would
be elucidated
in the following paragraphs.

Local farmers would
be benefited
enormously
if the shop owners willing to accommodate most of their
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products
which
are cultivated
without using pesticides or fertilizers.
Consequently
, the economic development of the particular society would be far more enhanced along with a rising standard of living of the
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people
who belong to agriculture by the way of receiving regular earnings towards their
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products
. Despite this, consumers are willing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
more local
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products
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because
there are no other substitutes available in the market.
Hence
, they have not envisaged major health problems in the future. Although they could not
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get
a massive collection of
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goods
, the quality of the
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products
has never
been compromised
.

However
,
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people
are always preferred a plethora of substitutes for a single item, then
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only
they can
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analyse
the quality and gratification of each one. This would possible
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only
with the assistance of international trade, which
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allows
a myriad of
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goods
from
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different
parts of the
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country
in a supermarket. Even the lower income
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people
can
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purchase
the
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products
, which are
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often
consumed by affluent
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people
, price is variable based on the cost of ingredients and the goodwill of the specified brand among the public.
Overwhelmingly
, the bonding between
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
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countries
would increase by the way of exporting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
. This cordial relationship with foreign
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countries
definitely assists when one has ended up with any financial losses or natural disasters.
Furthermore
, a large collection of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
would satisfy the various needs of the public and the shopkeeper
as well
.

To sum up,
even though
society would benefit if the shops accommodate local
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products
irrespective of the
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products
from other
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countries
, I believe that international trade should
be promoted
for satisfying multifarious needs of
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people
and
also
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ease
major issues of a
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country
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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