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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v.21

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 21
Over the last few years, there has been a significant increase in the number of people travelling to inhabitable or hostile places. Most of them are driven by a passion to achieve something that few others have been able to achieve. They want to experience the adrenalin rush that such expeditions bring on. Travelling to difficult places has both advantages and disadvantages. One of the biggest benefits of undertaking difficult journeys is that they improve one’s confidence in one’s abilities. While the journey can be physically and mentally exhausting, the exhilaration that one experiences upon its successful completion is not something that can be described in mere words. It is this need to test one’s limits that propelled sailors like Magellan and Columbus to sail around the world and discover unknown lands. It is this need to conquer the unknown that encourages people to climb mountains. And there are many takers for this trend. Adventure tourism is growing by leaps and bounds. People are aware of the risks, yet they want to experience the thrill. So, they set out on difficult journeys. On the flip side, difficult journeys can be extremely dangerous. Things can go against our plans. Lots of travellers have died while trekking difficult mountains or rafting in turbulent rivers. There are also many adventure travellers who sustain serious injuries that leave them immobile for the rest of their lives. Another drawback of such journeys is that if the travellers go missing or find themselves in trouble, the governments may have to launch costly rescue operations. To conclude, difficult journeys are extremely thrilling. They are equally dangerous; yet many people undertake them because they want to test their limits and conquer the unknown
Over the last few years, there has been a significant increase in the number of
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people
travelling to inhabitable or hostile places. Most of them
are driven
by a passion to achieve something that few others have been able to achieve. They want to experience the adrenalin rush that such expeditions bring on.

Travelling to
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difficult
places has both advantages and disadvantages. One of the biggest benefits of undertaking
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difficult
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journeys
is that they
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improve
one’s confidence in one’s abilities. While the
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journey
can be
physically
and mentally exhausting, the exhilaration that one experiences upon its successful completion is not something that can be
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described
in mere words. It is this need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
one’s limits that propelled sailors like Magellan and Columbus to sail around the world and discover unknown lands. It is this need to conquer the unknown that encourages
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people
to climb mountains. And there are
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many
takers for this trend. Adventure tourism is growing by leaps and bounds.
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People
are aware of the
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risks
,
yet
they want to experience the thrill.
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So
, they set out on
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difficult
journeys.

On the flip side,
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difficult
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journeys
can be
extremely
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dangerous
. Things can go against our plans. Lots of
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travellers
have
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died
while trekking
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difficult
mountains or rafting in turbulent rivers. There are
also
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many
adventure
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travellers
who sustain serious injuries that
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leave
them immobile for the rest of their
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lives
. Another drawback of such
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journeys
is that if the
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travellers
go missing or find themselves in trouble, the
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governments
may
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have to
launch costly rescue operations.

To conclude
,
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difficult
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journeys
are
extremely
thrilling. They are
equally
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dangerous
;
yet
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many
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people
undertake them
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because
they want to
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test
their limits and conquer the
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unknown
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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