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Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication v. 1
While there are some beliefs that sharing information such as scientific research, business and academic knowledge have advantages to other people, some do not take it as instructions which should follow. This assay will discuss about both views before the conclusion is reached. It is true that sharing some beneficial data publicly can support the other to use as their benefits. For example, some people who have their own business can adapt published operation strategy to help improve their brandings or marketing in order to promote their products to a wide range of customers. Consequently, this can cause in gaining more profit to their business. Moreover, it is possible that some research can be further developed to another level of advanced analysis. To illustrate, some scientists may improve existent publications and find more relevant topics or greater results. For instance, in developing chemical formulas, it needs several stages of experiments and scientists in order to reach a successful result. However, some resources may be too precious to share independently. To extend this point, some information regarding to operations, which business developers have been struggling to find the clearest solutions are important to his own industry to share with other developers in same marketing. If many people can use the same marketing pattern, it may cause the first developers to lose their clients eventually. Moreover, some practical knowledge can be used in illegal ways. There are bad people out there who can easily adjust some mechanic skills to commit crimes. For instance, skills for unlocking doors without using keys should not be shared freely because that may encourage inappropriate imitations. In conclusion, it has benefits for sharing information in relation to trading strategy or scientific examination to encourage the adaptation for businesses or further developments in science. However, I agree that some useful knowledge may probably be used to cause crimes in the future.
While there are
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some
beliefs that sharing information such as scientific research,
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business
and academic knowledge have advantages to other
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people
,
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some
do not take it as instructions which should follow. This assay will
Did you mean simply "discuss both"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about both
views
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before
the conclusion
is reached
.

It is true that sharing
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some
beneficial data
publicly
can support the other to
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use
as their benefits.
For example
,
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some
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people
who have their
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own
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business
can adapt published operation strategy to
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help
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improve
their
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brandings
or marketing in order to promote their products to a wide range of customers.
Consequently
, this can cause in gaining more profit to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
.
Moreover
, it is possible that
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some
research can be
further
developed to another level of advanced analysis. To illustrate,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
scientists may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
existent publications and find more relevant topics or greater results.
For instance
, in developing chemical formulas, it needs several stages of experiments and scientists in order to reach a successful result.

However
,
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some
resources may be too precious to share
independently
. To extend this point,
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some
information
The phrase 'regarding to' is not correct. Use "regarding" or "regard to".
regarding to
operations, which
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business
developers have been struggling to find the clearest solutions are
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important
to his
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own
industry to share with other developers in same marketing. If
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many
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people
can
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use
the same marketing pattern, it may cause the
first
developers to lose their clients
eventually
.
Moreover
,
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some
practical knowledge can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in illegal ways. There are
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bad
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people
out there who can
easily
adjust
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some
mechanic
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skills
to commit crimes.
For instance
,
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skills
for unlocking doors without using keys should not
be shared
freely
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because
that may encourage inappropriate imitations.

In conclusion
, it has benefits for sharing information in relation to trading strategy or scientific examination to encourage the adaptation for
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businesses
or
further
developments in science.
However
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that
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some
useful knowledge may
probably
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to cause crimes in the future.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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