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1. Some college students choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas in order to get a broad education. Others choose to focus on a single subject area in order to have a deeper understanding of that area. Which approach to course selection do you v.1

1. Some college students choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas in order to get a broad education. Others choose to focus on a single subject area in order to have a deeper understanding of that area. Which approach to course selection do you v. 1
It is believed that only governments have the power to solve environmental problems that are posing serious threats to today’s world. However, I think that protecting the earth is the responsibility of both governments and individuals. It is true that some environmental issues are too big for individuals to deal with. In order for serious problems, such as global warming, prolonged droughts, violent storms or other extreme weather events, to be effectively addressed, it requires the efforts and cooperation of politicians and large environmental organisations. This is because solving such problems requires special equipment, the use of modern technological devices and large numbers of experienced scientists to work together. For instance, it takes years for researchers to collect various samples and analyse huge amounts of data in order to know the major causes of global warming, and to help them find the most effective solutions to tackle this problem. Only governments can have sufficient funds and resources to invest in this. However, I believe that individuals also need to take responsibility for environmental protection. As individuals, we can help in various ways, such as recycling more, buying more energy-efficient household items or planting more trees in our gardens. I think that without the cooperation of both politicians and individuals, environmental issues will never be effectively tackled. For example, if farmers continue to burn forests for their own purposes, regardless of the government’s regulations, the problem of climate change will never be successfully mitigated. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that protecting the environment is the obligation of both politicians and individuals.
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is believed
that
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only
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governments
have the power to solve
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environmental
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problems
that are posing serious threats to
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today
’s world.
However
, I
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think
that protecting the earth is the responsibility of both
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governments
and individuals.

It is true that
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some
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environmental
issues are too
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big
for
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individuals
to deal with. In order for serious
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problems
, such as global warming, prolonged droughts, violent storms or other extreme weather
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events
, to be
effectively
addressed, it requires the efforts and cooperation of politicians and large
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environmental
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organisations
. This is
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because
solving such
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problems
requires special equipment, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of modern technological devices and large numbers of experienced scientists to work together.
For instance
, it takes years for researchers to collect various samples and
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analyse
huge amounts of data in order to know the major causes of global warming, and to
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help
them find the most effective solutions to tackle this
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problem
.
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Only
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governments
can have sufficient funds and resources to invest in this.

However
, I believe that
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individuals
also
need to take responsibility for
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environmental
protection. As
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individuals
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in various ways, such as recycling more, buying more energy-efficient household items or planting more trees in our gardens. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that without the cooperation of both politicians and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
,
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environmental
issues will never be
effectively
tackled.
For example
, if farmers continue to burn forests for their
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own
purposes, regardless of the
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government’s
regulations, the
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problem
of climate
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change
will never be
successfully
mitigated.

In conclusion
, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that protecting the environment is the obligation of both politicians and
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individuals
.
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IELTS essay 1. Some college students choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas in order to get a broad education. Others choose to focus on a single subject area in order to have a deeper understanding of that area. Which approach to course selection do you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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