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Speak about your first day at collegeHow old you wereHow you reached thereWhat happened? How you felt at the end of the day v.1

Speak about your first day at collegeHow old you wereHow you reached thereWhat happened? How you felt at the end of the day v. 1
There is no better feeling than staying close to nature. Most of the population around the globe have minimal knowledge about how important is our ecosystem. There are multiple reasons affiliated to it and in this essay, I will try to explain them with sufficient examples. The most significant reason of not giving importance to nature is the ignorance. Nowadays, people are more occupied with their personal comfort and less concern about the harm it could cause to the nature. For instance, travellers often leave a lot of refuse, during their visit to tourist place leaving a landfill. As a result, it becomes unpleasant for natural diversity to evolve around that place. The solution to this is, people should be more responsible and support government in keeping tourist places neat and tidy. Another compelling reason for lesser understanding is the lack of education regarding our environment. We all are aware that how important our ecosystem is, but most of us are not taught how to maintain it. To illustrate this, a debate was conducted in the Harvard University between the scholars and environmentalist, many of the scholars were unable to answer basic questions related to environmental issues. In contrast, The environmentalist were aware of the latest technologies used in the current world. This was enough to provide evidence to the professors of the University to understand where we lack and what needed to be improved. As a solution, the University introduced a new field of study as Environmental Science. In conclusion, Admiring nature is one one thing and keep it untouched from external entities is another. People should often provide some time in joining hands with various organizations supporting nature and should take active part in managing and building nature along with educating others.
There is no better feeling than staying close to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
. Most of the population around the globe have minimal knowledge about how
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important
is our ecosystem. There are multiple reasons affiliated to it and in this essay, I will try to
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explain
them with sufficient examples.

The most significant reason of not giving importance to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
is the ignorance. Nowadays,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are more occupied with their personal comfort and less concern about the harm it could cause to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
.
For instance
,
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travellers
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often
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leave
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a lot of
refuse, during their visit to tourist place leaving a landfill.
As a result
, it becomes unpleasant for natural diversity to evolve around that place. The solution to this is,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should be more responsible and support
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in keeping tourist places neat and tidy.

Another compelling reason for lesser understanding is the lack of education regarding our environment. We all are aware that how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
our ecosystem is,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
most of us are not taught how to maintain it. To illustrate this, a debate
was conducted
in the Harvard University between the scholars and environmentalist,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the scholars were unable to answer basic questions related to environmental issues.
In contrast
, The environmentalist were aware of the latest technologies
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used
in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
world. This was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to provide evidence to the professors of the University to understand where we lack and what needed to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
. As a solution, the University introduced a new field of study as Environmental Science.

In conclusion
, Admiring
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nature
is
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one one
thing and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
it untouched from external entities is another.
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People
should
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often
provide
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some
time in joining hands with various organizations supporting
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nature
and should take active part in managing and building
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
along with educating others.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Speak about your first day at collegeHow old you wereHow you reached thereWhat happened? How you felt at the end of the day v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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