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Speak about an important recent news event in your country and explain why it is important. v.1

Speak about an important recent news event in your country and explain why it is important. v. 1
Nowadays, cell phones have become very popular and easily available throughout the world. Most of the students from across the globe have access to smartphones and they have been using these gadgets not only for studying purposes but also for personal uses. However, I believe, the mobile phones should not be allowed in classrooms because it distracts the pupils and also affect the effective interaction. One of the main reasons for not allowing mobile phones during studying in classes is that it hampers the students' concentration and creates chaos in class. As a result, they don’t understand what the topic is about, obtains poor grades in mark sheet. For example, during my final year of undergraduate studies, there was a good student named Jahid, in my batch, who failed in his favourite subject because of mobile chatting during the lecture times. So, to make a student distract less from mobile phones, these kinds of electronic devices should be kept out of the classroom. Another reason is a disturbance in lecture, discussion between teacher and students. Although they can browse various sites using mobile data or Wi-Fi to get the information about the topic discussed in the classroom, but they might lack the knowledge miss important points and valuable advice, which their teacher is discussing. In addition, they might waste too much time visiting the non-authentic sites. For instance, there are many personal blogs and websites where the student cannot get a relevant understanding of the topic. All in all, despite having a few advantages of using the mobile devices in classrooms, they must not be allowed to use their cell phones so that in the future this can help them in achieving better results and build bright career. Furthermore, this maintains a better learning and teaching environment for both the students and teachers.
Nowadays, cell
phones
have become
very
popular and
easily
available throughout the world. Most of the
students
from across the globe have access to
smartphones and
they have been using these gadgets not
only
for studying purposes
but
also
for personal
uses
.
However
, I believe, the mobile
phones
should not be
allowed
in classrooms
because
it distracts the pupils and
also
affect the effective interaction.

One of the main reasons for not allowing mobile
phones
during studying in classes is that it hampers the students' concentration and creates chaos in
class
.
As a result
, they don’t understand what the topic is about, obtains poor grades in mark sheet.
For example
, during my final year of undergraduate studies, there was a
good
student
named
Jahid
, in my batch, who failed in his
favourite
subject
because
of mobile chatting during the lecture times.
So
, to
make
a
student
distract less from mobile
phones
, these kinds of electronic devices should be
kept
out of the classroom.

Another reason is a disturbance in lecture, discussion between teacher and
students
. Although they can browse various sites using mobile data or Wi-Fi to
get
the information about the topic discussed in the classroom,
but
they might lack the knowledge miss
important
points and valuable advice, which their teacher is discussing.
In addition
, they might waste too much time visiting the non-authentic sites.
For instance
, there are
many
personal blogs and websites where the
student
cannot
get
a relevant understanding of the topic.

All in all, despite having a few advantages of using the mobile devices in classrooms, they
must
not be
allowed
to
use
their cell
phones
so
that in the future this can
help
them in achieving better results and build bright career.
Furthermore
, this maintains a better learning and teaching environment for both the
students
and teachers.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Speak about an important recent news event in your country and explain why it is important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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