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Sone people think that newsapers are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Sone people think that newsapers are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source. v. 1
We have witnessed the rapid advancement of technology in the society. It is argued that newspapers are the best source of news, while others think new on the internet is better. In my perspective, I think both statements are reasonable and will elaborate below. There are certainly some benefits of reading newspaper. One of the merits is that high standard of language on newspapers. By simply reading newspapers from daliy basis, one can master wide range of vocabulary and grammar. consequently, individuals who read newspapers, are able to understand more quickly about the articles. Another benefit is that individuals are able to read it anytime. During the break time, employees can relax and enjoy on cafe by reading newspapers. This also can help people to kill time when they are waiting for their colleagues. However, there are opposing voices saying that the news presented better on television or the internet. To begin with, reporters on television are persuasive. When reporters are reporting some breaking news, local citizens generally pay more attentions because reporters have good voices and speak fluent English. Apart from this, news is free to access on the internet. By simply browsing news on ABC news website, people are able to read latest news immediately instead of spending few dollars on newspaper from stores. This helps the local resident to save money. In conclusion, some people prefer to read newspaper while others enjoy watching television and browsing news on the internet. I still think that people should read more newspaper because it helps people to enhance their standard of English and can have quick understanding.
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is argued
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newspapers
are the best source of
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, while others
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think
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new
on the internet is better. In my perspective, I
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think
both statements are reasonable and will elaborate below.

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certainly
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some
benefits of reading
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newspaper
. One of the merits is that high standard of language on
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newspapers
. By
simply
reading
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newspapers
from
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basis, one can master wide range of vocabulary and grammar.
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consequently
, individuals who
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read
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newspapers
, are able to understand more
quickly
about the articles. Another benefit is that individuals are able to
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read
it anytime. During the break time, employees can relax and enjoy on
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cafe
by reading
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newspapers
. This
also
can
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help
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people
to kill time when they are waiting for their colleagues.

However
, there are opposing voices saying that the
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news
presented better on television or the internet. To
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begin
with, reporters on television are persuasive. When reporters are reporting
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some
breaking
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news
, local citizens
generally
pay more attentions
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because
reporters have
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good
voices and speak fluent English. Apart from this,
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news
is free to access on the internet. By
simply
browsing
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news
on ABC
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news
website,
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are able to
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immediately
instead
of spending few dollars on
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from stores. This
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helps
the local resident to save money.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
prefer to
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read
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newspaper
while others enjoy watching television and browsing
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news
on the internet. I
still
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that
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should
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more
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newspaper
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because
it
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people
to enhance their standard of English and can have quick understanding.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Sone people think that newsapers are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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