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Sometimes one individual can have a great impact on a group or community Select one person and explain how you think this person has affected others in the group or community Give specific details and examples to explain your answer v.1

Sometimes one individual can have a great impact on a group or community Select one person and explain how you think this person has affected others in the group or community Give specific details and examples to explain your answer v. 1
Public parks are important for people in this fast-paced industrial society. Although some people believe that public parks offer great value, others argue that it would be better to use such spaces in addressing the accommodation problem of the growing population or for other business activities to strengthen the economy. I agree with the former view that public parks provide great benefit to not only people but also other species. Public parks are an alternative for people to be near to nature and away from their busy schedules. These spaces work as a resort for people to relax. The diverse number of plants and trees in these spaces offers a refreshing and revitalizing experience to their visitors. The natural landscape of these parks allows people to have morning and evening walks, which many medical studies have proven to be healthy for the human mind and body. In contrast, if these spaces are replaced with residential developments, it would create congestion in the environment that is very harmful to people’s health. Moreover, besides providing an escape for people to take a break from their hectic lifestyle. These places also play their role as sanctuaries for flora and fauna. Due to increasing urbanization, natural habitats of many species of plants and birds are destroyed rapidly. Since parks often have a diverse range of plants and trees, which allows many birds to take refuge. Moreover, some parks have nurseries for endangered plant species to protect them from extinction. Conversely, if these parks are converted into shopping centres, there will be no other way for these species to survive. To conclude, while other people’s opinion may vary, in my opinion, despite the increasing population and economic issues, public parks are critical for the well being of humans and other species. Therefore, they cannot be replaced by urbanization and commercialization.
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to relax. The diverse number of
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offers a refreshing and revitalizing experience to their visitors. The natural landscape of these
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medical studies have proven to be healthy for the human mind and body.
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species of
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birds to take refuge.
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have nurseries for endangered
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species to protect them from extinction.
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way for these species to survive.

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, while
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opinion may vary, in my opinion, despite the increasing population and economic issues,
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public
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parks
are critical for the
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well being
of humans and
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other
species.
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, they cannot
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by urbanization and commercialization.
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IELTS essay Sometimes one individual can have a great impact on a group or community Select one person and explain how you think this person has affected others in the group or community Give specific details and examples to explain your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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