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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Being able to speak well is better than being able to write well v.130

Being able to speak well is better than being able to write well v. 130
Nowadays, People are using poly-bags at large scale in various aspects of life, but it has an abundant drawback at the same time. Certain masses think it is not useful for soil, rivers, lakes and water animals. I think it could be harmful to not only land and sea, but complete ecosystem also. Poly-bags clog various paths in the rivers and most of the times small animals stuck in these and result in death. Although pollutants accumulate in the water, also these are harmful for them to feed. If this remains constant for few years, most of the species would extinct then. For instance, a large number of animals in different regions of the world have been dying because of pollution of poly-bags. The problems of dumping and recycling are raising with imparting poly-bags in the community. Although these bags destroy the fertility of soil, lands cannot be used after. For instance, Government of various countries is facing numerous problems such as storage of wastage of poly-bags. If solutions of dumping would not find, agricultural sector diminishes as well. Although plastic carry bags are in great demand for residential and shopping purposes, but health problems could also be seen due to excessive use. For instance, people are affected by serious illness such as cancer in various parts of the world. With this in mind, it would be really necessary to stop using these shopping bags instead People can use bags made of clothes. Certain level of education could be provided in schools and works in order to give awareness among the general public and this can be possible by participating government.
Nowadays,
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poly
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various
aspects of life,
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but
it has an abundant drawback at the same time. Certain masses
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think
it is not useful for soil, rivers, lakes and water animals. I
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think
it could be harmful to not
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land and sea,
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but
complete ecosystem
also
.

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-bags clog
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various
paths in the rivers and
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most of the times
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small
animals stuck in these and result in death. Although pollutants accumulate in the water,
also
these are harmful for them to feed. If this remains constant for few years, most of the species would extinct then.
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,
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a large number of
animals in
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different
regions of the world have been dying
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because
of pollution of
poly
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The problems of dumping and recycling are raising with imparting
poly
-bags in the community. Although these
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bags
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destroy
the fertility of soil, lands cannot be
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used
after.
For instance
,
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Government
of
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various
countries is facing numerous problems such as storage of wastage of
poly
-bags. If solutions of dumping would not find, agricultural sector diminishes
as well
.

Although plastic carry
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bags
are in great demand for residential and shopping purposes,
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but
health problems could
also
be
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seen
due to excessive
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use
.
For instance
,
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people
are
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affected
by serious illness such as cancer in
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various
parts of the world.

With this in mind, it would be
really
necessary to
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stop
using these shopping
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bags
instead


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can
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use
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bags
made of clothes. Certain level of education could
be provided
in schools and works in order to give awareness among the
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general public
and this can be possible by participating
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government
.
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IELTS essay Being able to speak well is better than being able to write well v. 130

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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