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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.5

Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. v. 5
It is important that we have to keep our surroundings clean and maintain hygiene in the life. A group of people believes that the government should take steps to maintain the area and another group argue that it is an individual's duty to clean the place. In my opinion, both the authority and individual should join and take efforts to maintain our areas. On the one hand, most of the garbages come from the houses and from the residential areas. Everyone should be aware about the impact of dumping in a public area without finding a suitable way to dump or recycle the garbage. Moreover, citizens can start segregating the waste and can accumulate it in a common area where the concern authority can come and collect the waste. For example, in Bangalore, most of the apartments segregate the waste and use bio-waste as manure for the plants. As a result of this, the environment is clean and it promoted the growth of the plants. On the other hand, the law enforcing agency can start awareness classes to the society about the collection and disposal. Additionally, they should arrange the facility to collect all the garbage from all the apartments and clean the public facilities daily. For instance, in Kerala, the authority has a group of women for handling the unwanted things from a family and they go and pick the plastics and papers from the roads, schools. This makes the city tidy and also act as a job for the women. In conclusion, maintaining a healthy life and a clean environment is the responsibility of both the individuals and the governments. By the joint effort and cooperation, we can make the environment green and pollution free.
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important
that we
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have to
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keep
our surroundings
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clean
and maintain hygiene in the life. A group of
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people
believes that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take steps to maintain the
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area
and another group argue that it is an individual's duty to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clean
the place. In my opinion, both the authority and individual should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
and take efforts to maintain our areas.

On the one hand, most of the
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garbages
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come
from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
and from the residential
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areas
. Everyone should be aware about the impact of dumping in a public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
without finding a suitable way to dump or recycle the garbage.
Moreover
, citizens can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
segregating the waste and can accumulate it in a common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
where the concern authority can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
and collect the waste.
For example
, in Bangalore, most of the apartments segregate the waste and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
bio-waste as manure for the plants.
As a result
of this, the environment is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clean
and it promoted the growth of the plants.

On the other hand
, the law enforcing agency can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
awareness classes to the society about the collection and disposal.
Additionally
, they should arrange the facility to collect all the garbage from all the apartments and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clean
the public facilities daily.
For instance
, in Kerala, the authority has a group of women for handling the unwanted things from a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
family and
they go and pick the plastics and papers from the roads, schools. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the city tidy and
also
act as a job for the women.

In conclusion
, maintaining a healthy life and a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clean
environment is the responsibility of both the individuals and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
. By the joint effort and cooperation, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the environment green and pollution free.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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