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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.3

Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. v. 3
There has been a raging debate about whose duty it is to ensure our environment is clean and tidy. A certain school of thought is of the opinion that residents ought to be responsible. Others, however, say it is the government's duty. In my opinion, the people should carry out this task. This essay will discuss both views and my opinion. On one hand, supporters of the first view above say humans should have that role because our activities are responsible for garbage and trash in the first place. If we did not drop refuse indiscriminately, our cities would not be untidy. The onus therefore lies with humans to do make sure waste is properly disposed. For example, despite the bin bags and cans abound people still litter the roads. I agree with this view and say we should made to do more about cleanliness. On the other hand, those with a contrasting view opine that government should be accountable owing to the fact that it has the powers to implement and enforce waste management programs, unlike individuals. They believe that with government's pool of funds it can provide cleaners and trash collectors in every area. England, for instance, there are cleaners stationed at major roads to pick up refuse and this means the people responsible for the waste are not sanctioned or advised to desist. To sum up, despite the contrary view noted I say the citizens should have the responsibility of keeping our areas clean and tidy. The government is advised to embark on creating awareness and educate people on the benefits of a living in a cleaner and serene society.
There has been a raging debate about whose duty it is to ensure our environment is clean and tidy. A certain school of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
is of the opinion that residents ought to be responsible. Others,
however
, say it is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's duty. In my opinion, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should carry out this task. This essay will discuss both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
views
and my opinion.

On one hand, supporters of the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
view
above say humans should have that role
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
our activities are responsible for garbage and trash in the
first
place. If we did not drop refuse
indiscriminately
, our cities would not be untidy. The onus
therefore
lies with humans to do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure waste is
properly
disposed.
For example
, despite the bin bags and cans abound
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
still
litter the roads. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
view
and say we should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "make"
made
to do more about cleanliness.

On the other hand
, those with a contrasting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
view
opine that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should be accountable owing to the fact that it has the powers to implement and enforce waste management programs, unlike individuals. They believe that with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's pool of funds it can provide cleaners and trash collectors in every area. England,
for instance
, there are cleaners stationed at major roads to pick up refuse and this means the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
responsible for the waste are not sanctioned or advised to desist.

To sum up, despite the contrary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
view
noted I say the citizens should have the responsibility of keeping our areas clean and tidy. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is advised
to embark on creating awareness and educate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
on the benefits of a living in a cleaner and serene society.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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