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Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. v. 5
To some people, sorts of information and advice should be acquired from acquaintances. However, others believe that books and the Internet are the best way to approach them. While people, sometimes, could provide helpful information and advice to some extent, I believe that other sources such as books or the Internet are more significant. The most common reason that people should obtain information from others is that it often comes from daily interaction, which can be easily achieved by actively communicating with others. During the conversation, they are likely to share different types of information that might be helpful and necessary in certain situations. Apart from that, people need to receive advice from other people, who might probably have been in similar circumstances before had successfully overcome that. For example, before taking the IELTS test, candidates could ask the former ones, who are with many years of experience and expertise, to get helpful recommendations such as being confident and punctual. Therefore, their outcomes will be more rewarding and satisfied. Alongside the source of information and advice given by others expressed above, I believe that the Internet and books could facilitate people to achieve them more effectively. Generally, most books are written by professionals and journalists, who are experienced and well-qualified. Therefore, people could rely on them to get their wanted information. Besides, self-help books also play an important role in conveying helpful advice and are highly recommended for those who are struggling with their hurdles. They often contain advanced instructions and steps that people could follow to get rid of their matters. Besides, the Internet is also considered as a great source of information due to its convenience and comfort. People could take advantage of it to get online and help themselves by using the searching tool - Google, and millions of results will pop up on the screen. In conclusion, although for some people, it is better to receive consultancy from others, I believe that the mentioned reasons above regarding the impact of books and the Internet could have a far greater effect.
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or the Internet are more significant.

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people
should obtain
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information
from others is that it
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often
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comes
from daily interaction, which can be
easily
achieved by
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communicating with others. During the conversation, they are likely to share
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different
types of
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information
that might be
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helpful
and necessary in certain situations. Apart from that,
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people
need to receive
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advice
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taking the IELTS
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, candidates could ask the former ones,
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who
are with
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many
years of experience and expertise, to
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helpful
recommendations such as being confident and punctual.
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, their outcomes will be more rewarding and satisfied.

Alongside the source of
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information
and
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advice
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given
by others expressed above, I
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believe
that the Internet and
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books
could facilitate
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people
to achieve them more
effectively
.
Generally
, most
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books
are written
by professionals and journalists,
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who
are experienced
and well-qualified.
Therefore
,
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people
could rely on them to
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get
their wanted
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information
.
Besides
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help
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books
also
play an
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important
role in conveying
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helpful
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advice
and are
highly
recommended for those
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who
are struggling with their hurdles. They
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often
contain advanced instructions and steps that
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people
could follow to
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get
rid of their matters.
Besides
, the Internet is
also
considered as a great source of
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information
due to its convenience and comfort.
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People
could take advantage of it to
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get
online and
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help
themselves by using the searching tool
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Google, and millions of results will pop up on the screen.

In conclusion
, although for
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, it is better to receive consultancy from others, I
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believe
that the mentioned reasons above regarding the impact of
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books
and the Internet could have a far greater effect.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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