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Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.4

Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. 4
Which way is the best method to get information has become a hot topic of discussion these days. Some people perceive that we can take other peoples’ recommendations and ideas while others believe it is better to do it through the books and internet. In this essay, I shall discuss both perspectives in detail before reaching a final verdict that both perspectives hold equal significance. There are numerous compelling reasons why it is vital for us to get advice from others, such as parents and friends and the prominent one is that some valuable and useful thoughts that are based on their personal life experience are beneficial to us as it enables us to avoid many unpleasant experience and achieve our goals more easily and effectively. Take myself for example, I tend to ask for my parents thoughts and ideas when I had some issues in my life because they can always help me to cope with these issues with their genius ideas. As a result, our life is positively impacted by doing this. However, some oppose this notion and says that information on the books or the internet is more reliable. The crucial beneficial factor of searching on the internet and books is that it is an efficient way for us to collect useful information, especially in the academic areas because we can assess a wide range of categories. For instance, a recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that nearly 80% of Japanese students opt online searching when they doing their essays at school. Therefore, this method of collecting information is gaining popularity in recent years. To sum up, people’s opinion towards how to get advice is various. Taking everything into consideration, I’m inclined to say that it should be a combined usage of both methods that will have a profound impact on our life.
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Which
way is the best method to
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get
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information
has become a hot topic of discussion these days.
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Some
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people
perceive that we can take other peoples’ recommendations and
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ideas
while others believe it is better to do it through the books and internet. In this essay, I shall discuss both perspectives in detail
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before
reaching a final verdict that both perspectives hold equal significance.

There are numerous compelling reasons why it is vital for us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
advice from others, such as parents and friends and the prominent one is that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
valuable and useful thoughts that
are based
on their personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
experience are beneficial to us as it enables us to avoid
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many unpleasant experience
and achieve our goals more
easily
and
effectively
. Take myself
for example
, I tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
my parents thoughts and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
when I had
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some
issues in my
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life
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because
they can always
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help
me to cope with these issues with their genius
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.
As a result
, our
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life
is
positively
impacted by doing this.

However
,
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some
oppose this notion and says that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
on the books or the internet is more reliable. The crucial beneficial factor of searching on the internet and books is that it is an efficient way for us to collect useful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
,
especially
in the academic areas
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
we can assess a wide range of categories.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that
nearly
80% of Japanese students opt online searching when
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they doing
their essays at school.
Therefore
, this method of collecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
is gaining popularity in recent years.

To sum up,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s opinion towards how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
advice is various. Taking everything into consideration, I’m inclined to say that it should be a combined usage of both methods that will have a profound impact on our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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