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Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. v. 1
People have different views about the betterment of seeking advice from other individuals or from the Internet. While I agree that Internet provides us with a wide range of information in a fraction of time, I believe experts are the best option when it comes to matters of life and death. On the one hand, the Internet and e-books therein have been filled with real-life experiences which can be considered as a solution for some specific problems. This is because many share their knowledge about all aspects of life ranging from employing different methods of nurturing a child to repairing top-of-the-range appliances with fewer money. Since such information can be obtained by clicking on a button or tapping on a mobile screen, many people regard it as an efficient way of gaining other peoples’ experience. On the other hand, I believe some piece of knowledge must be acquired not from the Internet but from special experts. This is because not all information available online can be applied to all humans and a piece of advice may vary from person to person. For example, there are many STD’s (Sexually-transmitted diseases) with a common initial symptom. However, not all of them can be treated with antibiotics. Thus, it is clear that almost all medical advice on the Internet can be misleading not because it has no academic backgrounds but because it may misunderstand the user. In conclusion, I believe the Internet is the best choice to share and gain hands-on experiences. Nevertheless, it may cost someone’s life if the user misapply the information on his or her life.
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People
have
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different
views about the betterment of seeking advice from other individuals or from the Internet. While I
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agree
that Internet provides us with a wide range of
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information
in a fraction of time, I believe experts are the best option when it
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comes
to matters of
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life
and death.

On the one hand, the Internet and e-books therein have
been filled
with real-life experiences which can
be considered
as a solution for
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some
specific problems. This is
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because
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many share
their knowledge about all aspects of
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life
ranging from employing
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different
methods of nurturing a child to repairing top-of-the-range appliances with
Did you mean "less money"?
fewer money
. Since such
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information
can
be obtained
by clicking on a button or tapping on a mobile screen,
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many
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people
regard it as an efficient way of gaining other peoples’ experience.

On the other hand
, I believe
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some
piece of knowledge
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must
be acquired
not from the Internet
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but
from special experts. This is
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because
not all
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information
available online can
be applied
to all humans and a piece of advice may vary from person to person.
For example
, there are
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many
STD’s (
Sexually
-transmitted diseases) with a common initial symptom.
However
, not all of them can
be treated
with antibiotics.
Thus
, it is
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clear
that almost all medical advice on the Internet can be misleading not
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because
it has no academic backgrounds
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but
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because
it may misunderstand the user.

In conclusion
, I believe the Internet is the best choice to share and gain hands-on experiences.
Nevertheless
, it may cost someone’s
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life
if the user
misapply
the
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information
on
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his or her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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