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Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.3

Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. 3
Knowledge is considered to be a tool that has great power. Some say obtaining information from people who we interact from the daily life are better when compared to the information taken from the world wide web or from the printed material. In my opinion, both of these sources are equally important and relevant to succeed in life. On the one hand, critics who are in favour of getting information from others would argue that, people from day to day lives can provide us an ample of believable knowledge that cannot be found on anywhere else. To elaborate, as humans we always tend to believe information obtained from another human being, this is mainly due to the emotions, experience and the level of truth attached with that information. For instance, we would believe something that an ex-convict has to say about the life in prison rather than retrieving the same information by reading a book. Similarly, a story of life experiences and hardship being told to us by a parent would have a much stronger attachment and an impact than seeing or hearing from a different source. On the other hand, some oppose the above argument and believe that knowledge and information found in printed media or the web would contain a plethora of information. To put differently, the internet has revolutionised the way we work and how we obtain information. As long it's from a credible source, information found on the internet are extremely reliable and have benefitted an ample of organisations or individuals such as, the police, research scientists or even students. For example, an online library access provided by my university allowed me access to un-imaginable amount of journals and academic articles, therefore, with the help of this I was able to successfully complete my final year research. In conclusion, I strongly believe that information and knowledge obtained from both of these sources are equally important in life. Information, experiences and lessons obtained from others can always be used to shape your life for the better, while information retrieved from the internet can be used to improve the overall knowledge in a particular area. However, on both of these instances the information must be from a credible source.
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Knowledge
is considered
to be a tool that has great power.
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Some
say obtaining
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information
from
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people
who we interact from the daily
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life
are better when compared to the
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information
taken from the
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world wide web
or from the printed material. In my opinion, both of these
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sources
are
equally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
and relevant to succeed in life.

On the one hand, critics who are in
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favour
of getting
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information
from others would argue that,
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people
from day to day
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
can provide us
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an ample of
believable
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knowledge
that cannot
be found
on anywhere else. To elaborate, as humans we always tend to
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believe
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information
obtained from another human being, this is
mainly
due to the emotions, experience and the level of truth attached with that
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information
.
For instance
, we would
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believe
something that an ex-convict
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has to
say about the
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life
in prison
rather
than retrieving the same
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information
by reading a book.
Similarly
, a story of
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life
experiences and hardship being
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told
The verb 'to tell someone' does not require a preposition.
to us
by a parent would have a much stronger attachment and an impact than seeing or hearing from a
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different
source.

On the other hand
,
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some
oppose the above argument and
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believe
that
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knowledge
and
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information
found in printed media or the web would contain a plethora of
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information
. To put
differently
, the internet has
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revolutionised
the way we work and how we obtain
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information
. As
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long it
's from a credible
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source
,
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information
found on the internet are
extremely
reliable and have
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benefitted
The phrase 'an ample of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'an' and 'of'.
an ample of
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organisations
or individuals such as, the police, research scientists or even students.
For example
, an online library access provided by my university
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allowed
me
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access
to
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un-imaginable
amount of journals and academic articles,
therefore
, with the
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help
of this I was able to
successfully
complete my final year research.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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believe
that
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information
and
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knowledge
obtained from both of these
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sources
are
equally
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important
in
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life
.
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Information
, experiences and lessons obtained from others can always be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to shape your
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life
for the better, while
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information
retrieved from the internet can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to
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improve
the
overall
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knowledge
in a particular area.
However
, on both of these instances the
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information
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be from a credible
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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