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Some think that economic progress is completely dependent on the country’s success, while others believe that other factors are also important. What are the different factors contributing to the success of a country? Do you believe that only one factor is important, compared to others? v.1

Some think that economic progress is completely dependent on the country’s success, while others believe that other factors are also important. What are the different factors contributing to the success of a country? Do you believe that only one factor is important, compared to others? v. 1
It is one of the fundamental duties of the government to offer quality health care to its civilians. Some people debate that private hospitals are better for the patience, whilst another group of people think that government hospitals treat people free of cost and organise by the government. My notion is that governmental facilities are always required, but there should be no restriction on private health care. On the one hand, private health care offers competitive and qualitative medical services to the people. Also, highly qualified professionals are hired to work for the community to ensure a certain enhanced quality of services offered. Moreover, private sector units are profit making organizations that invest a significant amount of their profits in acquiring latest technology and research. This is highly beneficial to the patients in the long run. Finally, private hospitals offer better facilities like 24 hour emergency services, ambulance, networks and super specialty hospitals and so on. Though, on the flip side, it is also true that some private hospitals sometime overcharge their patients to maximize profits. On the other hand, one of the best thing about government hospitals is that it offers cost effective and better accessibility. In addition, it is available in the smallest of towns and villages of the country, where under- privileged people are benefited from it as well as governments can get donations and allocate funds to offer health care to the civilians. However, it is often observed that public health care centres may not provide satisfactory services primarily because of the huge cost of free health care. To recapitulate, it is evident that both systems of offering health care have their own merits and demerits and yet both are required in present day societies. Hence, I opine that private healthcare should not be eliminated.
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government
to
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offer
quality
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health
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care
to its civilians.
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Some
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people
debate that
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private
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hospitals
are better for the patience, whilst another group of
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people
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think
that
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government
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hospitals
treat
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people
free of cost and
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organise
by the
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government
. My notion is that governmental facilities are always required,
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but
there should be no restriction on
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private
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health
care.

On the one hand,
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private
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health
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care
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offers
competitive and qualitative medical
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services
to the
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people
.
Also
,
highly
qualified professionals
are hired
to work for the community to ensure a certain enhanced quality of
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services
offered.
Moreover
,
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private
sector units are profit making organizations that invest a significant amount of their profits in acquiring
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
technology and research. This is
highly
beneficial to the patients in the long run.
Finally
,
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private
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hospitals
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offer
better facilities like
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
24 hour
emergency
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services
, ambulance, networks and super specialty
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hospitals
and
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so
on. Though, on the flip side, it is
also
true that
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some
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private
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hospitals
sometime overcharge their patients to maximize profits.

On the other hand
, one of the best thing about
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government
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hospitals
is that it
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offers
cost effective and better accessibility.
In addition
, it is available in the smallest of towns and villages of the country, where under- privileged
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people
are benefited
from it
as well
as
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governments
can
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get
donations and allocate funds to
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offer
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health
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care
to the civilians.
However
, it is
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often
observed that public
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health
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care
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centres
may not provide satisfactory
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services
primarily
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because
of the huge cost of free
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health
care.

To recapitulate, it is evident that both systems of offering
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health
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care
have their
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own
merits and demerits and
yet
both
are required
in present day societies.
Hence
, I opine that
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private
healthcare should not
be eliminated
.
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44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some think that economic progress is completely dependent on the country’s success, while others believe that other factors are also important. What are the different factors contributing to the success of a country? Do you believe that only one factor is important, compared to others? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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