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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations. v.2

Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations. v. 2
There are two types of accommodation which students have to decide when they go to university. The first one is staying with families while the other one is to live in places which are away from students’ home. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of each choice. To begin with, a large proportion of students still prefer living with their families for some merits. This selection offers students an effective way to save their budget. While accommodations such as dormitories, mini-flats, small apartments keep increasing the prices continuously these days, staying at home seems to be a perfect option to cut off the expenses significantly. Moreover, people can spend more time with their families when they are at home during the academic studying period. However, students may find it inconvenient to travel every day to their institutes. In addition, staying at home could have a negative impact on the studying concentration due to the lazy lifestyle of living too long in students’ comfort zone. On the contrary, living live in accommodations away from home can bring some positive effects to students’ personal experience. Firstly, many people are afraid to live by themselves because of the habit of relying on the parents at home. Staying in completely strange places offer great opportunity to improve students’ confidence to live on their own. Secondly, travelling to studying facilities seems much easier for these places are typically close to the universities. Yet, when people select these accommodations, they should calculate the living expenses carefully because their budget could burn out fast. Also, the connection to family’s members will be minimized. Since students now spend more time on hanging out with social friend, the frequency of family meeting will definitely reduce. In conclusion, there are good and bad sides whether students choose to stay at home or away from their homes when they go to university.
There are two types of
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accommodation
which
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students
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have to
decide when they go to university. The
first
one is
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staying
with
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families
while the other one is to
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live
in places which are away from
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students’
home. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of each choice.

To
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begin
with, a large proportion of
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students
still
prefer
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living
with their
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families
for
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some
merits. This selection offers
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students
an effective way to save their budget. While accommodations such as dormitories, mini-flats,
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small
apartments
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keep
increasing the prices
continuously
these days,
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staying
at home seems to be a perfect option to
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cut
off the expenses
significantly
.
Moreover
,
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people
can spend more time with their
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families
when they are at home during the academic studying period.
However
,
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students
may find it inconvenient to travel every day to their institutes.
In addition
,
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staying
at home could have a
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negative
impact on the studying concentration due to the lazy lifestyle of
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living
too long in
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students’
comfort zone.

On the contrary
,
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living
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live
in accommodations away from home can bring
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some
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positive
effects to
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students’
personal experience.
Firstly
,
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many
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people
are afraid to
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live
by themselves
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because
of the habit of relying on the parents at home.
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Staying
in completely strange places offer great opportunity to
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improve
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students’
confidence to
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live
on their
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own
.
Secondly
, travelling to studying facilities seems much easier for these places are
typically
close to the universities.
Yet
, when
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people
select these accommodations, they should calculate the
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living
expenses
carefully
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because
their budget could burn out
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fast
.
Also
, the connection to
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family’s
members will
be minimized
. Since
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students
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now
spend more time on hanging out with social friend, the frequency of
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family
meeting will definitely
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reduce
.

In conclusion
, there are
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good
and
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bad
sides whether
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students
choose to stay at home or away from their
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homes
when they go to university.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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