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Some students would prefer to live with roommates. Others would prefer to lie alone. Which option would tou prefer and why? v.2

Some students would prefer to live with roommates. Others would prefer to lie alone. Which option would tou prefer and why? v. 2
The English language has become the most used languages in the world because of the development in the tourism sector. Some individuals say that this would make English language the only way to communicate worldwide. This essay will first suggest the easier communication between the citizens of different nations is the primary benefit, while the possibility of having certain languages disappear is a major drawback of having single global language. Making single language a global tool to communicate makes the communication convenient between people from different linguistic backgrounds. This is to say that people do not have to worry about the language barrier when they travel different parts of the world because everyone speaks the same words. Additionally, they can easily adapt the circumstances as there will be very less chance to get confused about others' perception. For example, countries like New Zealand, Canada, Australia and the UK have made the knowledge of English language mandatory for those who wants to immigrate there, because they believe that immigrants would not face any difficulties while communicating if they know the common-tongue. Despite the benefit of easy communication, single-global-language system could lead many languages from different communities to disappear from the world. This means, since only one language would be in operation, people would be reluctant to learn other languages because their limited applications. As a result, many languages that are in operation from the ancient times would extinct from the planet. For example, a recent study conducted by the BBC News revealed that every month 10 less-spoken languages are being extinct from our planet because many nations are widely practiced commonly used languages as their communication tool. In conclusion, the convenience in communication with the use of one common language is the primary merit of single-global-language system, but the extinction of other languages from different communities around the world is its major demerit.
The English
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world
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of the development in the tourism sector.
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individuals say that this would
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English
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way to communicate worldwide. This essay will
first
suggest the easier
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communication
between the citizens of
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different
nations is the primary benefit, while the possibility of having certain
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languages
disappear is a major drawback of having single global language.

Making single
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language
a global tool to communicate
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makes
the
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convenient between
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people
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different
linguistic backgrounds. This is to say that
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barrier when they travel
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different
parts of the
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world
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because
everyone speaks the same words.
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adapt the circumstances as there will be
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less chance to
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confused about others' perception.
For example
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language
mandatory for those who wants to immigrate there,
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because
they believe that immigrants would not face any difficulties while communicating if they know the common-tongue.

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communication
, single-global-language system could lead
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many
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languages
from
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communities to disappear from the
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world
. This means, since
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would be in operation,
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people
would be reluctant to learn other
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languages
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because
their limited applications.
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,
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languages
that are in operation from the ancient times would extinct from the planet.
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, a recent study conducted by the BBC News revealed that every month 10 less-spoken
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languages
are being extinct from our planet
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because
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many
nations are
widely
practiced
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used
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languages
as their
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communication
tool.

In conclusion
, the convenience in
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communication
with the
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of one common
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is the primary merit of single-global-language system,
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but
the extinction of other
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from
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different
communities around the
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world
is its major demerit.
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IELTS essay Some students would prefer to live with roommates. Others would prefer to lie alone. Which option would tou prefer and why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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