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Some single people like to live with a roommate, while other like to live alone. Which would you prefer? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Some single people like to live with a roommate, while other like to live alone. Which would you prefer? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
As human is societal living being, he or she has tendency to live with peers friends or other people. So, he or she automatically gravitates to such kind of condition. On the other hand, others tend to the opposite view, living alone. Some aspects of arguments are comprehensively discussed as follows. One cogent reason relating to living alone is to bring us new experiences, while being with roommate does not offer us such benefits. For example, living by yourself makes you be responsible. In other words, you had better plan your own duties, such as cooking food, cleaning house, washing and ironing clothes, without any help of someone else. Regardless of these tasks, you should handle a maintenance of your house like fixing facet in kitchen, and pay house rent yourself. Most importantly, you learn to be independent and make a vital decision in your life based on your own experience. However, if you share a flat with roommate, you are not responsible for all tasks that you face it, and the best part in sharing room is to save your money or to lessen your further expenditures. Another point that I should stress here is that living on your own bring you to feel comfortable and enjoyable. Certainly, sharing room with friend or strangers may be annoying for one who likes a silence or for one who is shy. The best experience that I have had up to now is that living alone makes your hours become flexible, whenever you are willing you can get up, turn on TV and so forth, whereas sharing room may cause acute problems, watching TV by roommate may coincide with hours of your sleeping. So, this somewhat may be unbearable to you. However. Having roommate may occasionally be suitable to you. It forces you to get rid of some bad habits. Finally, living on your own undoubtedly accompany some serious problems. On the other hand, it is accommodating for someone else who is patron of a quite environment. Some favorable advantages are to gain valuable experiences, to be in comfortable phases. So, I would rather anyone not become my roommate.
As human is societal
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living
being, he or she has tendency to
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live
with peers friends or
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other
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people
.
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So
, he or she
automatically
gravitates to such kind of condition. On the
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other
hand, others tend to the opposite view,
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living
alone.
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Some
aspects of arguments are
comprehensively
discussed as follows.

One cogent reason relating to
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living
alone is to bring us new
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experiences
, while being with
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roommate
does not offer us such benefits.
For example
,
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living
by yourself
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makes
you be responsible. In
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other
words, you had better plan your
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own
duties, such as cooking food, cleaning
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house
, washing and ironing clothes, without any
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help
of someone else. Regardless of these tasks, you should handle a maintenance of your
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house
like fixing facet in kitchen, and pay
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house
rent yourself. Most
importantly
, you learn to be independent and
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make
a vital decision in your life based on your
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own
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experience
.
However
, if you share a flat with
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roommate
, you are not responsible for all tasks that you face it, and the best part in sharing room is to save your money or to lessen your
further
expenditures.

Another point that I should
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stress
here is that
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living
on your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
bring you to feel comfortable and enjoyable.
Certainly
, sharing room with friend or strangers may be annoying for one who likes a silence or for one who is shy. The best
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experience
that I have had up to
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now
is that
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living
alone
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makes
your hours become flexible, whenever you are willing you can
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get
up, turn on TV and
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so
forth, whereas sharing room may cause acute problems, watching TV by
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roommate
may coincide with hours of your sleeping.
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So
, this somewhat may be unbearable to you.
However
. Having
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roommate
may
occasionally
be suitable to you. It forces you to
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get
rid of
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some
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bad
habits.

Finally
,
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living
on your
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own
undoubtedly
accompany
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some
serious problems. On the
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other
hand, it is accommodating for someone else who is patron of a
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quite environment
.
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Some
favorable advantages are to gain valuable
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experiences
, to be in comfortable phases.
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So
, I would
rather
anyone not become my
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roommate
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some single people like to live with a roommate, while other like to live alone. Which would you prefer? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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