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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Every child should be raised in a home with two parents. v.666

Every child should be raised in a home with two parents. v. 666
In this 21st century, there has been increasing the number of divorce rate day by day. People feel better to live without spouse. Some people think that childbearing is very difficult for single parents from financial hardship and have a more responsibility of families. Other people argue that there are wonderful benefits for a single parent in raising families but I believe there has more struggle in rising families for a single parents, ultimately men and women should share equal responsibilities of parenting for rising families. Some people believe that being a single is infinitely preferable to living a bad marriage. Somewhere the children raised to seen with fighting of parents. That considers them to negative effects on brain. They might learn the negative behaviour from bad environment of family. Moreover, consider all time to figuring out the partner bargain, fulfilling all of requirement and figuring out the new demand of spouse may distract to focus on the children so, it’s very preferable to doing alone is easier than have a spouse. However, single parents might be face the financial unfeasible or hardship to fulfil all the requirements and demand of children. Nowadays, everything has too costly; the price has increasing of thing day by day so, it is very difficult to handle all expenses by the single parents earnings. Single parents might lose to give all facilities for children as like as both parents. For instance, the education was more expensive this day, if you want to join children in good private boarding school. Thus, if both parents share equal efforts is far better for children rather than single parents. Some others people claim that a single parent has better for families to make proper and own decision. There are no debates for any decision between families. Single parent continuously trying to maintain proper household and will raise healthy children. Single parents frequently take single own decision without ask anyone. He/she continuously thinks about their own way to handle the families. Likewise, single parents able to make own rule and regulations for a healthy family which is very favourable for each member and make fix time table for a children education, entertainment and sleeping time table according to parent’s time. On the other hand, it is important that children are able to get the equal responsibilities from the both parents. Single parents might be faced the difficulties to handle all responsibility for caring families. For instance after a long work, the parents must return home to cook dinner, clean the house, spend a little time with child because there are no anyone to divide the responsibilities. It is very difficult to do everything perfectly and may lose form the responsibility. Therefore, share responsibility of family between both parents should make happier family. In conclusion, it is clearly seen that it arises more obstacles for single parent to give the best parental to rising families. Single parents may face the financial hardship and difficult to take all responsibility of families. Therefore, both parents should take equal responsibilities for raising families and make them a good future.
In this 21st century, there has been increasing the number of divorce rate day by day.
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People
feel better to
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live
without spouse.
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Some
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people
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think
that childbearing is
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very
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difficult
for
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single
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parents
from financial hardship and have a more
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responsibility
of
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families
. Other
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people
argue that there are wonderful benefits for a
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single
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parent
in raising
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families
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but
I believe there has more struggle in rising
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families
for a
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single
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parents
,
ultimately
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men
and women should share
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equal
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responsibilities
of parenting for rising families.

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Some
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people
believe that being a
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single
is
infinitely
preferable to living a
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bad
marriage. Somewhere the
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children
raised to
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seen
with fighting of
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parents
. That considers them to
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negative
effects on brain. They
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might
learn the
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negative
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behaviour
from
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bad
environment of
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family
.
Moreover
, consider all
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time
to figuring out the partner bargain, fulfilling
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all of requirement
and figuring out the new demand of spouse may distract to focus on the
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children
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so
, it’s
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very
preferable to doing alone is easier than have a spouse.

However
,
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single
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parents
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might
be
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face
the financial unfeasible or hardship to fulfil all the requirements and demand of
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children
. Nowadays, everything has too costly; the price has increasing of thing day by day
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so
, it is
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very
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difficult
to handle all expenses by the
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single
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parents
earnings.
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Single
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parents
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might
lose to give all facilities for
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children
as like as both
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parents
.
For instance
, the education was more expensive this day, if you want to
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join
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children
in
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good
private boarding school.
Thus
, if both
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parents
share
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equal
efforts is far better for
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children
rather
than
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single
parents.

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Some
others
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people
claim that a
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single
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parent
has better for
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families
to
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make
proper and
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own
decision. There are no debates for any decision between
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families
.
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Single
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parent
continuously
trying to maintain proper household and will raise healthy
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children
.
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Single
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parents
frequently
take
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single
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own
decision without ask anyone. He/she
continuously
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thinks
about their
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own
way to handle the
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families
.
Likewise
,
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single
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parents
able to
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make
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own
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rule
and regulations for a healthy
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family
which is
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very
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourable' is British English.
favourable
for each member and
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make
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fix
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time
table for a
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children
education, entertainment and sleeping
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time
table according to
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parent’s
time.

On the other hand
, it is
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important
that
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children
are able to
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get
the
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equal
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responsibilities
from the both
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parents
.
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Single
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parents
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might
be faced
the difficulties to handle all
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responsibility
for caring
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families
.
For instance
after a long work, the
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parents
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must
return home to cook dinner, clean the
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house
, spend a
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little
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time
with child
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because
there are no anyone to divide the
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responsibilities
. It is
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very
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difficult
to do everything
perfectly
and may lose form the
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responsibility
.
Therefore
, share
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responsibility
of
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family
between both
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parents
should
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make
happier family.

In conclusion
, it is
clearly
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seen
that it arises more obstacles for
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single
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parent
to give the best parental to rising
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families
.
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Single
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parents
may face the financial hardship and
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difficult
to take all
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responsibility
of
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families
.
Therefore
, both
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parents
should take
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equal
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responsibilities
for raising
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families
and
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make
them a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
future.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
94Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Every child should be raised in a home with two parents. v. 666

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
516 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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