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Some scientists believe that studying the behaviour of 3-year-old children can tell which children would grow up to be criminals. To what extent in your opinion is crime a product of human nature or is it possible to stop children from growing up to be cri v.2

Some scientists believe that studying the behaviour of 3-year-old children can tell which children would grow up to be criminals. 2
Some scientists are of the opinion that hereditary characteristics are responsible for the person’s temperament and hence future career. I disagree with this notion. I believe that genes do play a role but the primary determinant is nurture – education and bringing up. It is definitely possible to mould a child into any direction by proper bringing-up. If we adopt the mindset that if parents are criminals so will the children be then we are limiting or even damaging the individual’s basic right to achieve his very best. Children can rise above the gene pool and rise to great heights. Even if a child is born to criminal parents but brought up away from that environment and provided quality education, he will not be a criminal. The debate on nature versus nurture has been raging for ages and no clear cut answer has come forward. A child prodigy can be born to ordinary parents and many intelligent parents can have ordinary children. A talented person can go unnoticed in the absence of right environment and upbringing and an ordinary person can reach great heights with proper training. So, interplay between hereditary and environmental factors must be there. It has been seen that children born to intelligent parents also are intelligent and successful. But it is also possible that such parents provide an environment which nurtures the development of their children. When we see some programmes such as ‘India’s Got Talent’ and ‘Little Champs’, we notice some extremely gifted children who are born with talent and also some who have achieved great heights with great perseverance and proper coaching. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that both nature and nurture play a part in determining the character of a person. It can also be concluded that both are inextricably linked with each other. But nurture weighs over nature and it is definitely possible to prevent children from growing up to be criminals.
Some
scientists are of the opinion that hereditary characteristics are responsible for the

person
’s temperament and
hence
future career. I disagree with this notion. I believe
that


genes
do play a role
but
the primary determinant is nurture
education and bringing up. It

is
definitely possible to
mould
a child into any direction by proper bringing-up.

If we adopt the mindset that if
parents
are criminals
so
will the
children
be then we are

limiting
or even damaging the individual’s basic right to achieve his
very
best.
Children
can


rise
above the gene pool and rise to
great
heights.
Even if
a child
is born
to criminal
parents


but
brought up away from that environment and provided quality education, he will not be

a
criminal.

The debate on nature versus nurture has been raging for ages and no
clear
cut
answer has

come
forward. A child prodigy can
be born
to ordinary
parents
and
many
intelligent
parents


can
have ordinary
children
. A talented person can go unnoticed in the absence of
right


environment and upbringing and an ordinary person can reach
great
heights with proper

training
.
So
, interplay between hereditary and environmental factors
must
be there.

It has been
seen
that
children
born to intelligent
parents
also
are intelligent and successful.

But
it is
also
possible that such
parents
provide an environment which nurtures the

development
of their
children
. When we
see
some
programmes
such as ‘India’s
Got
Talent


and ‘
Little
Champs’, we notice
some
extremely
gifted
children
who
are born
with talent and

also
some
who have achieved
great
heights with
great
perseverance and proper coaching.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that both nature and nurture play a part in

determining
the character of a person. It can
also
be concluded
that both are
inextricably


linked
with each other.
But
nurture weighs over nature and it is definitely possible
to


prevent
children
from growing up to be criminals.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Mistakes

IELTS essay Some scientists believe that studying the behaviour of 3-year-old children can tell which children would grow up to be criminals. 2

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