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Some schools, usually elementary through high school, have dress codes or requirestudents to wear uniforms. (This is not very common in colleges and universities, except at military schools) What do you think of elementary schools or high schoolshaving a d v.1

Some schools, usually elementary through high school, have dress codes or requirestudents to wear uniforms. (This is not very common in colleges and universities, except at military schools) What do you think of elementary schools or high schoolshaving a d v. 1
Robots are being employed / deployed / used in more and more fields now. Some people think that they are essential for our progress while others insist that they are dangerous. In my opinion, robots are beneficial to mankind. There is no denying the fact that robots have had a positive impact on the society since their introduction. They are capable of doing many things that people cannot do. For example, robots can work in extreme weather conditions or dangerous circumstances. They can be deployed to perform rescue operations in places hit by natural calamities like earthquakes. They are able to perform mundane tasks without getting bored and with utmost precision. They can even babysit and perform household chores. Another use of robots is in stores. Obviously, there are many benefits to using robots. Some people, however, argue that robots can be dangerous. It is not possible to claim that these fears are totally baseless. In the future as robotic technology develops, we will probably have robots that can think and feel. Such robots, in my opinion, will most probably be harmful for human beings. However, I also feel that scientists will stop before we reach that stage. Another argument against robots is that they will lead to unemployment. Of course, if robots replace humans in all fields, unemployment will be a major issue. On the flip side, humans will still be needed to build, operate and maintain all those robots. That means, if robots create unemployment in one sector, they will most probably create employment opportunities in another sector. Taking everything into consideration, I have come to the conclusion that we cannot halt the production or deployment of robots because the benefits of using robots outweigh the disadvantages if any
Robots are
being employed
/ deployed /
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used
in more and more fields
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now
.
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Some
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people
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think
that they are essential for our progress while others insist that they are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
. In my opinion, robots are beneficial to mankind.

There is no denying the fact that robots have had a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impact on the society since their introduction. They are capable of doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
things that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
cannot do.
For example
, robots can work in extreme weather conditions or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
circumstances. They can
be deployed
to perform rescue operations in places hit by natural calamities like earthquakes. They are able to perform mundane tasks without getting bored and with utmost precision.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
They
can even babysit and perform household chores. Another
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use
of robots is in stores.
Obviously
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
benefits to using robots.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
however
, argue that robots can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
. It is not possible to claim that these fears are
totally
baseless. In the future as robotic technology develops, we will
probably
have robots that can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
and feel. Such robots, in my opinion, will most
probably
be harmful for human beings.
However
, I
also
feel that scientists will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
we reach that stage. Another argument against robots is that they will lead to unemployment.
Of course
, if robots replace humans in all fields, unemployment will be a major issue. On the flip side, humans will
still
be needed
to build, operate and maintain all those robots. That means, if robots create unemployment in one sector, they will most
probably
create employment opportunities in another sector.

Taking everything into consideration, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the conclusion that we cannot halt the production or deployment of robots
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the benefits of using robots outweigh the disadvantages if any
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some schools, usually elementary through high school, have dress codes or requirestudents to wear uniforms. (This is not very common in colleges and universities, except at military schools) What do you think of elementary schools or high schoolshaving a d v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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