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Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v.5

Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v. 5
Some High scorers and low scorers will always be there in every field, few people can perform extraordinarily good in one thing while others don’t like it at all. These differences are everywhere and hence people must be treated accordingly. I am in oppose that advanced students should be provided with separate classes to ensure that they can sharpen their edges even more. Leveling up students in skills that they already have is obviously a good idea as it will help to accentuate there skills even more. This opportunity is being provided to every student in most of the countries nowadays and that too in different things like Studies, Sports and other extra-curricular activities. In my school for example, one student was good at playing tennis than any of the other students in the tennis group and as an result to his performance he was sent to the training academy with school’s support and now he is an national level player. So, yes if the right guidance and support is there students can do good in their field of advancements. To contradict the same, there are even disadvantages for this as everything comes with a price so does this. Many of the times it happens that the students start to consider themselves much more than any of their peers. The student that was sent to go through specific training in tennis no doubt became one of the advanced level player but he also started to consider everyone else below him whether they are the mates or teachers. And one more very important drawback is that these people will usually became less socially active as they always have their limited accesses to a specific group of people who are like them only. They have access to challenging materials but they don’t always boost their inner personality but only the tasks they are good at. As a solution to this, the access to more advanced materials should be provided to students within the class premises only. This will not create differences between students and will help them to unite more. To Conclude, There are basically an equal number of advantages and disadvantages for giving advanced understanding of the qualities a person is good at. But, My opinion would be that the access should be there to good material but people should not be segregated from their mates, they should be taught being good at their things by keeping them in the same class environment in school.
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people
can perform
extraordinarily
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good
in one thing while others don’t like it at all. These differences are everywhere and
hence
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people
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must
be treated
accordingly
. I am in oppose that
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advanced
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students
should
be provided
with separate classes to ensure that they can sharpen their edges even more.

Leveling up
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students
in
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skills
that they already have is
obviously
a
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good
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idea
as it will
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help
to accentuate there
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skills
even more. This opportunity is
being provided
to every
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student
in most of the countries nowadays and that too in
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different
things like Studies, Sports and other extra-curricular activities. In my school
for example
, one
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student
was
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good
at playing tennis than any of the other
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students
in the tennis group and as
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an
result to his performance he was
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sent
to the training academy with school’s support and
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now
he is
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an
national level player.
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, yes if the right guidance and support is there
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students
can do
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good
in their field of advancements.

To contradict the same, there are even disadvantages for this as everything
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comes
with a price
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so
does this.
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of the times it happens that the
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students
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start
to consider themselves much more than any of their peers. The
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student
that was
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sent
to go through specific training in tennis no doubt became one of the
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advanced
level player
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but
he
also
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started
to consider everyone else below him whether they are the mates or teachers. And one more
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very
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important
drawback is that these
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people
will
usually
became less
socially
active as they always have their limited
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accesses
to a specific group of
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people
who are like them
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only
. They have
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access
to challenging materials
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but
they don’t always boost their inner personality
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but
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only
the tasks they are
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good
at.

As a solution to this, the
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access
to more
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advanced
materials should
be provided
to
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students
within the
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class
premises
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only
. This will not create differences between
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students
and will
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help
them to unite more.

To Conclude
, There are
basically
an equal number of advantages and disadvantages for giving
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advanced
understanding of the qualities a person is
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good
at.
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But
, My opinion would be that the
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access
should be there to
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good
material
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but
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people
should not
be segregated
from their mates, they should
be taught
being
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good
at their things by keeping them in the same
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class
environment in school.
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IELTS essay Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
414 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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