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Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
In my country, it is quite common to separate the best students from others so they can learn more advanced subject matter. While this practice can benefit top students by ensuring they receive a sufficient challenge, I would argue against separating students this way because doing so is unnecessary, and it prevents an excellent opportunity for socialization. The main idea is that levelling students in school seems like a very natural thing to do. In many areas such as sports, music, or language study, it often makes sense to separate people by skill level. A beginning English student wouldn’t get very much out of an advanced English grammar course, for example. In these cases, allowing individuals of a similar level to practice and study together ensures an appropriate challenge for everyone. Of course, in basic academic areas such as math and writing, student skill levels will also vary widely. The benefit of separating students according to skill is that highly proficient students can progress at a faster pace, while lower-level students can have more time to develop. But I would argue that this separation comes at a great cost. Kids need to learn how to work with others who have different skills, interests, and aptitudes. This is a basic part of proper socialization, which ought to be a main focus of schools. Separating students limits these socialization opportunities significantly. While it is true that students should be provided with material that is appropriate for their level, I would argue it is not necessary to divide students into different classes to accomplish this. These days, skilled teachers should learn how to assess different student levels in math or reading, and provide appropriate instruction and practice for students across the skill spectrum. This can happen when teachers devote most of class time to applied practice, where students can work on exercises alone or collaboratively and teachers provide feedback. In conclusion, even though there is educational value to separating students by ability, I believe a skilled teacher can create appropriately challenging learning experiences for students across a wide spectrum of skill levels. Schools should avoid separating students in order to create a valuable opportunity for socialization.
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from others
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so
they can learn more advanced
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subject matter
. While this
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practice
can benefit top
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students
by ensuring they receive a sufficient challenge, I would argue against
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separating
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students
this way
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because
doing
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is unnecessary, and it
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prevents
an excellent opportunity for socialization.

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idea
is that levelling
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students
in school seems like a
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very
natural thing to do. In
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many
areas such as sports, music, or language study, it
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often
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makes
sense to separate
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people
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skill
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level
. A beginning English
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student
wouldn’t
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get
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much out of an advanced English grammar course,
for example
. In these cases, allowing individuals of a similar
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level
to
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practice
and study together ensures an appropriate challenge for everyone.
Of course
, in basic academic areas such as math and writing,
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student
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skill
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levels
will
also
vary
widely
. The benefit of
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separating
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students
according to
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skill
is that
highly
proficient
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students
can progress at a faster pace, while lower-level
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students
can have more time to develop.

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comes
at a great cost. Kids need to learn how to work with others who have
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different
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skills
, interests, and aptitudes. This is a basic part of proper socialization, which ought to be a main focus of schools.
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Separating
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students
limits these socialization opportunities
significantly
. While it is true that
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students
should
be provided
with material
that is
appropriate for their
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level
, I would argue it is not necessary to divide
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students
into
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different
classes to accomplish this. These days, skilled
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teachers
should learn how to assess
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different
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student
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levels
in math or reading, and provide appropriate instruction and
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practice
for
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students
across the
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skill
spectrum. This can happen when
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teachers
devote most of
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class
time to applied
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practice
, where
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students
can work on exercises alone or
collaboratively
and
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teachers
provide feedback.

In conclusion
,
even though
there is educational value to
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separating
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students
by ability, I believe a skilled
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teacher
can create
appropriately
challenging learning experiences for
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students
across a wide spectrum of
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skill
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levels
. Schools should avoid
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separating
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students
in order to create a valuable opportunity for socialization.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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