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We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. Inyour opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (some-one you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain whythese characteristics are im v.2

We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. Inyour opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (some-one you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain whythese characteristics are im v. 2
It's a true fact that if a percentage of money from health budget will be spent on providing health education and prevention rather than focusing more on their treatments. I defer to this to a large extent for some reasons. My position is argued further with explanations. Out of all the reasons, the foremost one is the costly treatments nowadays, which can't be afforded by every individual of that country. As day by day scientists are dealing with a great number of diseases which requires a lot of funds to carry on their research and these expenses are compensated by increasing the price of treatment. So instead of paying hefty money, we must have the proper information regarding that and that's not only good for us but also the people's who are living around us. Additionally, If everyone has a proper education of all the kinds of diseases, it may help them to be prepared for the upcoming which may infect them. It can be done by broadcasting a plethora of ads on the channel such as T. V. , billboards, online plus much more way. From this large number of masses will be alert and pay attention to it. However, I would not overlook the other side too. To begin with, medicines and treatment play's their own role in helping the public. As in case of emergency, hospitalization is a primary thing and that time doctors know much better about it. Also, they became a god for us at that time. Thus to conclude the discussion, it can finally be said that it is essential for us of having guidance whereas hospitals are always there for us.
It's a true fact that if a percentage of money from health budget will
be spent
on providing health education and prevention
rather
than focusing more on their
treatments
. I defer to this to a large extent for
some
reasons. My position
is argued
further
with explanations.

Out of all the reasons, the foremost one is the costly
treatments
nowadays, which can't
be afforded
by every individual of that country. As day by day scientists are dealing with a great number of diseases which requires
a lot of
funds to carry on their research and these expenses
are compensated
by increasing the price of
treatment
.
So
instead
of paying hefty money, we
must
have the proper information regarding that and that's not
only
good
for us
but
also
the
people
's who are living around us.

Additionally
, If everyone has a proper education of all the kinds of diseases, it may
help
them to
be prepared
for the upcoming which may infect them. It can
be done
by broadcasting a plethora of ads on the channel such as T. V.
,
billboards, online plus much more way. From this large number of masses will be alert and pay attention to it.

However
, I would not overlook the other side too. To
begin
with, medicines and
treatment
play's their
own
role in helping the public. As in case of emergency, hospitalization is a primary thing and that time doctors know much better about it.
Also
, they became a god for us at that time.

Thus
to conclude
the discussion, it can
finally
be said
that it is essential for us of having guidance whereas hospitals are always there for us.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. Inyour opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (some-one you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain whythese characteristics are im v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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