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Some say that young people are not suitable for decision-making positions in governments, others, however disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some say that young people are not suitable for decision-making positions in governments, others, however disagree. v. 1
With age and experience, people can make a proper and reliable decision. Many believe that the young generation are not eligible to make judgment in government sector and other believes the opposite. In further paragraph, I intend to explain both the views before giving the opinion. On the one hand, many people think that the younger generation is incapable of ruling, due to their impulsive nature. But according to current senior, young generation can serve better for the nation's development. With their education, practical skills, they are more knowledgeable and can contribute to the betterment of the government. For instance, In India, the majority of the members in authority sectors are in their 20's and 30's. The ratio of young generation is more compared to older people. Thus, for betterment of such generation, they prefer verdict made by young politician. On the other hand, many think that older and experienced people are more suitable for decision making in the government. Because of their experience in the same field, they can provide proper guidance and can propose new better schemes. But, in the present government sector, the elder people who are appointed in different position were selected at an early age and has less education qualification then the current youth politicians. Thus, the thinking ability of the public and politician does not match, which indirectly affects the law system and public. In the conclusion, I would pen down, saying that, although decision making becomes more precise with age and experience, but in current scenario practicality and young mind is required to run the government.
With age and experience,
people
can
make
a proper and reliable decision.
Many
believe that the
young
generation are not eligible to
make
judgment in
government
sector and other believes the opposite. In
further
paragraph, I intend to
explain
both the views
before
giving the opinion.

On the one hand,
many
people
think
that the younger generation is incapable of ruling, due to their impulsive nature.
But
according to
current
senior,
young
generation can serve better for the nation's development. With their education, practical
skills
, they are more knowledgeable and can contribute to the betterment of the
government
.
For instance
, In India, the majority of the members in authority sectors are in their
20's
and
30's
. The ratio of
young
generation is more compared to older
people
.
Thus
, for betterment of such generation, they prefer verdict made by
young
politician.

On the other hand
,
many
think
that older and experienced
people
are more suitable for
decision making
in the
government
.
Because
of their experience in the same field, they can provide proper guidance and can propose new better schemes.
But
, in the present
government
sector, the elder
people
who
are appointed
in
different
position
were selected
at an early age and has less education qualification
then
the
current
youth politicians.
Thus
, the thinking ability of the public and politician does not match, which
indirectly
affects the law system and public.

In the conclusion, I would pen down, saying that, although
decision making
becomes more precise with age and experience,
but
in
current
scenario practicality and
young
mind
is required
to run the
government
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some say that young people are not suitable for decision-making positions in governments, others, however disagree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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