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in many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this? v.16

in many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this? v. 16
With the development of the world, lad is becoming scars. There is a major neccicity of houses, but the only space is available in the countryside. Eventhough homes are basic need, some people argue of protecting countryside rather than building homes for people. I opine that building houses without harming the nature would be the answer for this question. Firstly, people should be throughly educated on environment and it’s values, and on the current problem with having no space in urban areas for houses. Through that they will understand the value of biodiversity and work accordingly to build homes while protecting the environment. Moreover, through proper landscaping and planning, people can build houses, and that will ass more value to them. For instance human are looking at homes and workplaces in a environmental friendly manner. Hence an environmental friendly home will become a huge asset in the future. However, inorder to achieve that, it is neccesary to educate people on environmental compliance. In addition government should take action to promote eco friendly homes. Since, they are the main body that can make an influence on common people, the responsibility relies with them. Most effective way to abide people on building eco friendly homes are by enforcing a law. Also, bio gases should be introduced, where they can make use of the wastage. And, indirectly it will help to reduce land and air pollution. Plus, solar system can be a great advantage for this cause. Therefore, government should come forward to solve the need for new home through promoting environmental sustainability. In conclusion, building homes in countryside would not be a harm to the environment, as long as proper measures are taken in to consideration. Hence, I firmly believe eco friendly homes will be the best solution for this problem.
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neccicity
of
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houses
,
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only
space is available in the countryside.
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Eventhough
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homes
are basic need,
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some
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people
argue of protecting countryside
rather
than
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building
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homes
for
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people
. I opine that
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building
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houses
without harming the nature would be the answer for this question.

Firstly
,
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people
should be
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throughly
educated on environment and it’s values, and on the
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current
problem with having no space in urban areas for
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houses
. Through that they will understand the value of biodiversity and work
accordingly
to build
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homes
while protecting the environment.
Moreover
, through proper landscaping and planning,
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people
can build
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houses
, and that will ass more value to them.
For instance
human are looking at
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homes
and workplaces in
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a
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environmental
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friendly
manner.
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Hence
an
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environmental
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friendly
home will become a huge asset in the future.
However
,
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inorder
to achieve that, it is
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neccesary
to educate
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people
on
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environmental
compliance.

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addition
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government
should take action to promote eco
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friendly
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homes
. Since, they are the main body that can
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make
an influence on common
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people
, the responsibility
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relies
with them. Most effective way to abide
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people
on
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building
eco
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friendly
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homes
are by enforcing a law.
Also
,
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bio gases
should
be introduced
, where they can
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make
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use
of the wastage. And,
indirectly
it will
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help
to
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reduce
land and air pollution. Plus, solar system can be a great advantage for this cause.
Therefore
,
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government
should
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come
forward to solve the need for new home through promoting
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environmental
sustainability.

In conclusion
,
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building
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homes
in countryside would not be a harm to the environment, as long as proper measures
are taken
in to consideration.
Hence
, I
firmly
believe eco
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friendly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homes
will be the best solution for this problem.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay in many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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