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Some say that Technology has made food surplus. Others say it has made food harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some say that Technology has made food surplus. Others say it has made food harmful. v. 1
A highly controversial issue today relates to technology in relation to food production. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view and then give my own opinion on the matter. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of technology in food production considerably outweighs its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that with the advancement of technology processing and packaging food has become a seamless process. It is also possible to say that with the advent of agricultural machines for land cultivation, the standard of food produced has increased tremendously. One good example of this is the Sumal food factory in Kuala Lumpur where a thousand bags of beans are produced daily. On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact consuming technologically produced food is dangerous to the health of the consumer. People often have this opinion because they feel that processed food tend to lose more than 80 percent of its nutrients in comparison to fresh farm produce naturally cultivated and consumed. A second point is that due the use of machineries for the production and processing of food the unemployment is at an all-time high as workers are being replaced with machines. A particularly good example is the mass lay off of 1000 workers from Landu farms in 2018, these workers complained about being replaced with machines. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance, however, I feel that technology has and will always be a blessing to mankind in the area of food production. This is because more people are being fed and are able to afford these commodities due to the reduced sale prices.
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highly
controversial issue
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today
relates to
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technology
in relation to
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food
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production
. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view and then give my
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own
opinion on the matter.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that the benefits of
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technology
in
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food
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production
considerably
outweighs its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that with the advancement of
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technology
processing and packaging
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food
has become a seamless process. It is
also
possible to say that with the advent of agricultural machines for land cultivation, the standard of
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food
produced has increased
tremendously
. One
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good
example of this is the
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Sumal
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food
factory in Kuala Lumpur where a thousand bags of beans
are produced
daily.

On the other hand
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also
possible to
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make
the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact consuming
technologically
produced
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food
is
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dangerous
to the health of the consumer.
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People
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often
have this opinion
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because
they feel that processed
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food
tend to lose more than 80 percent of its nutrients
in comparison
to fresh farm produce
naturally
cultivated and consumed. A second point is that due the
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use
of
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machineries
for the
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production
and processing of
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food
the unemployment is at an all-time high as workers are
being replaced
with machines. A
particularly
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good
example is the mass lay off of 1000 workers from
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Landu
farms in 2018, these workers complained about
being replaced
with machines.

In conclusion
, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I feel that
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technology
has and will always be a blessing to mankind in the area of
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food
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production
. This is
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because
more
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people
are
being fed
and are able to afford these commodities due to the
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reduced
sale prices.
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IELTS essay Some say that Technology has made food surplus. Others say it has made food harmful. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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