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Nowadays we can see definite signs of surplus production in almost every industry sector and this is leading to environmental damage What are some possible solutions to this situation v.2

Nowadays we can see definite signs of surplus production in almost every industry sector and this is leading to environmental damage What are some possible solutions to this situation v. 2
Continuous downgrading of environment is the gravest concern of modern-day life. Industrial units in every market segment are over-producing today, and this certainly takes a toll on the local habitat. This development surely needs some prohibitive measures and efforts from both the government and industries can effectively address this problem. State, to begin with, can play a crucial role in damage control. Government authorities can assure the proper implementation of pollution check policies at local production units. This surveillance by state will push industries to practice pollution controlling measures, strictly. Additionally, developing nations where levels of industrial pollution are significantly high, should enforce tighter laws against those contributing to environmental pollution. Several such laws have been introduced by Malaysian government since 2005, and this has resulted in a 2-degree dip in the average temperature of the country which was constantly raising due to industrial gases depleting ozone layer of the geographical region. Industries, especially the ones where production targets are consistently crossed, should take into consideration the consequences of environmental damage they are doing. Every organization should consider environmental protection as their moral duty, and ought to contribute regularly for ensuring well-being of the mother nature. One way they can do this is by keeping production targets to a limit where industrial waste produced is not a threat to the surroundings. Furthermore, they should continuously research for the technology that can minimize the overall waste produced by an industrial unit. Finally, initiatives such as tree plantation in the industrial neighborhood can help drastically in reducing the pollution of the area. In conclusion, It is evident that extra production is surely damaging the natural habitat and local governments and industrial sectors can certainly come up with some potential remedies for the problem in discussion.
Continuous downgrading of environment is the gravest concern of modern-day life.
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Industrial
units in every market segment are over-producing
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today
, and this
certainly
takes a toll on the local habitat. This development
surely
needs
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some
prohibitive measures and efforts from both the
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government
and industries can
effectively
address this problem.

State, to
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begin
with, can play a crucial role in damage control.
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Government
authorities can assure the proper implementation of
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pollution
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check
policies at local
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production
units. This surveillance by state will push industries to practice
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pollution
controlling measures,
strictly
.
Additionally
, developing nations where levels of
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industrial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
are
significantly
high, should enforce tighter laws against those contributing to environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
. Several such laws have
been introduced
by Malaysian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
since 2005, and this has resulted in a 2-degree dip in the average temperature of the country which was
constantly
raising due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industrial
gases depleting ozone layer of the geographical region.

Industries,
especially
the ones where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
production
targets are
consistently
crossed, should take into consideration the consequences of environmental damage they are doing. Every organization should consider environmental protection as their moral duty, and ought to contribute
regularly
for ensuring well-being of the mother nature. One way they can do this is by keeping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
production
targets to a limit where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industrial
waste produced is not a threat to the surroundings.
Furthermore
, they should
continuously
research for the technology that can minimize the
overall
waste produced by an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industrial
unit.
Finally
, initiatives such as tree plantation in the
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industrial
neighborhood can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
drastically
in reducing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
of the area.

In conclusion
, It is evident that extra
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production
is
surely
damaging the natural habitat and local
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governments
and
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industrial
sectors can
certainly
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come
up with
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some
potential remedies for the problem in discussion.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays we can see definite signs of surplus production in almost every industry sector and this is leading to environmental damage What are some possible solutions to this situation v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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