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Some say that only people born with certain talents should practice arts such as music, painting, and poetry. Others, however, think that anyone can participate in these activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some say that only people born with certain talents should practice arts such as music, painting, and poetry. Others, however, think that anyone can participate in these activities. v. 1
We are living in the 21st century and technology is everywhere, in every aspect of life. Human cannot live without advance and new technology that reduce human work and efforts. But it also brings changes in living standard; Culture and traditional way of doing things overtaking by modern machinery. This essay will examine both of the views and provide a conclusive summary. In my opinion, I disagree with the above statement that by following traditional skills along with modern life style is pointless. Because Culture has its own value and technology has its own advantages. Firstly, culture is all about our norms, values and Morales that give a shape to society; how to live a happy life whereas automation helps to make that life easy not happy. Secondly, Old traditions are being transferred to one generation to another, so that knowledge and capabilities shall be available among humans. For instance, China is the only nation who follows its culture with rigidity. Chinese are the part of one of the developed nations and technologically advanced but still they didn't let die their customs and values. The art of Kungfu fighting is still being taught by the masters to the new breed. They still use Chinese as their business language, whereas whole world use English as a business language. To conclude, it can be said that being technologically advanced does not mean that old culture is useless for the coming generation. However, Culture provides a direction to humans to use technology in such a way so that nature and human life may sustain on Earth forever.
We are living in the 21st century and
technology
is everywhere, in every aspect of
life
.
Human
cannot
live
without advance and new
technology
that
reduce
human
work and efforts.
But
it
also
brings
changes
in living standard;
Culture
and traditional way of doing things overtaking by modern machinery. This essay will examine both of the views and provide a conclusive summary.

In my opinion, I disagree with the above statement that by following traditional
skills
along with modern
life
style is pointless.
Because
Culture
has its
own
value and
technology
has its
own
advantages.
Firstly
,
culture
is all about our norms, values and Morales that give a shape to society; how to
live
a happy
life
whereas automation
helps
to
make
that
life
easy not happy.

Secondly
,
Old
traditions are
being transferred
to one generation to another,
so
that knowledge and capabilities shall be available among
humans
.
For instance
, China is the
only
nation who follows its
culture
with rigidity. Chinese are the part of one of the developed nations and
technologically
advanced
but
still
they didn't
let
die
their customs and values. The art of
Kungfu
fighting is
still
being taught
by the masters to the new breed. They
still
use
Chinese as their business language, whereas whole world
use
English as a business language.

To conclude
, it can
be said
that being
technologically
advanced does not mean that
old
culture
is useless for the coming generation.
However
,
Culture
provides a direction to
humans
to
use
technology
in such a way
so
that nature and
human
life
may sustain on Earth forever.
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IELTS essay Some say that only people born with certain talents should practice arts such as music, painting, and poetry. Others, however, think that anyone can participate in these activities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
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