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Some say that due to heavy traffic governments need to build more roads in metropolitan cities, while others argue this isn't the right solution. v.2

Some say that due to heavy traffic governments need to build more roads in metropolitan cities, while others argue this isn't the right solution. v. 2
Advancement of the world has brought tremendous development in the transportation system, but in developing and undeveloped countries, increases in private vehicles has become the main reason of traffic blocks. Some people argue that the government should take initiatives in building more roads to solve this problem but some others argue building road is not the right solution. However, I tend to agree with the latter statement that construction of new roads is not the only and proper solution for it. First and foremost, government’s initiative to make new roads for reducing the heavy traffic in metropolitan cities is not the way but it is the wastage of government funds which should be used for the basic purpose of the society. To be precise, building new roads instead of limiting private vehicles will do no effect on traffic flow. For example, a country like India has to give more priority to the basic needs of low-income society such as in healthcare, employment, education more instead of developing road system which is of least important for the development of a country. Moreover, one of the other reasons why it is not a right solution to build new roads is that it is wastage of land resource. To be clear, construction of new roads will take away acres of land from agriculture which affect the economy of the farmers that lead to impact the revenue of that particular place. However, the argument of building new roads to reduce heavy traffic by government is mainly because of wastage of time and fuel spent in the traffic blocks but if the same traffic can be managed by endorsing new rules to limit private vehicles and encourage and improve public transport facility which can reduce heavy traffic to a larger extent. To sum up, after analysing the argument of building roads by public sector and the opposite view that it is not the only right solution, it is evident that if government take initiatives to control the number of private vehicles by increasing taxes and parking charges, and also by developing public transportation system it can not only control heavy traffic but also its will be a great help for the next generation by saving fuel, time and life from accidents.
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but
in developing and undeveloped countries, increases in
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private
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vehicles
has become the main reason of
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traffic
blocks.
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Some
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people
argue that the
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government
should take initiatives in
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building
more
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roads
to solve this problem
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but
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some
others argue
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building
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road
is not the right
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.
However
, I tend to
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agree
with the latter statement that construction of
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new
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roads
is not the
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only
and proper
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solution
for it.

First
and foremost,
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government’s
initiative to
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make
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new
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roads
for reducing the
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heavy
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traffic
in metropolitan cities is not the way
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but
it is the wastage of
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government
funds which should be
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used
for the basic purpose of the society. To be precise,
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building
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new
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roads
instead
of limiting
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private
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vehicles
will do no effect on
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traffic
flow.
For example
, a country like India
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has to
give more priority to the basic needs of low-income society such as in healthcare, employment, education more
instead
of developing
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road
system which is of least
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important
for the development of a country.

Moreover
, one of the other reasons why it is not a right
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solution
to build
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new
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roads
is that it is wastage of land resource. To be
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clear
, construction of
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new
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roads
will take away acres of land from agriculture which affect the economy of the farmers that lead to impact the revenue of that particular place.
However
, the argument of
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building
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new
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roads
to
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reduce
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heavy
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traffic
by
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government
is
mainly
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because
of wastage of time and fuel spent in the
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traffic
blocks
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but
if the same
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traffic
can
be managed
by endorsing
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new
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rules
to limit
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private
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vehicles
and encourage and
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improve
public transport facility which can
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reduce
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heavy
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traffic
to a larger extent.

To sum up, after
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analysing
the argument of
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building
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by public sector and the opposite view that it is not the
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only
right
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solution
, it is evident that if
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government
take initiatives to control the number of
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private
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vehicles
by increasing taxes and parking charges, and
also
by developing public transportation system it can not
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only
control
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heavy
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traffic
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but
also
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its
will be a great
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help
for the
next
generation by saving fuel, time and life from accidents.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some say that due to heavy traffic governments need to build more roads in metropolitan cities, while others argue this isn't the right solution. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
376 words
6.0
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