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Some say that advertisements of toys and snacks have a huge impact on children and their parents and therefore advertising to children should be banned Do you agree or disagree with the statement Give your own opinion v.1

Some say that advertisements of toys and snacks have a huge impact on children and their parents and therefore advertising to children should be banned Give your own opinion v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter concerning the yearly festival being held at my house on the 20th of April 2020. I am so thrilled after knowing that this year’s fair is to be organised at my home. Last year, it was splendid and astonishing. Everything was well organized and synchronized perfectly, and particularly the plethora of cuisines displayed at the fair was awe-inspiring. Moreover, the ambience of the entire fair was glamorous and elegant. Let me explain about myself a bit. I am an event manager for the past 5 years and hence I have managed various college events and conference previously. Furthermore, I have some connections that could assist you in this event, for instance, there are a few disc jockeys in my contact who are incredibly talented and affordable. Additionally, if you have any issues with the decoration do let me know, I know some decorators and suppliers who can provide items required efficiently and at a low cost. Also, If there are any requirements to be done, please don’t hesitate to contact me. Although the previous year's festival was astounding, but I had a few suggestions to upgrade the enthusiasm even more, for example, including a singing and dancing competition would be zealous. In addition to this, even though the variety of cuisine presented was amazing as the former festival, but adding a live kitchen would enhance the serving experience to another level. Let me know what you think of my ideas. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you Yours sincerely, Shakib Qureshi
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter concerning the yearly festival
being held
at my
house
on the 20th of April 2020.

I am
so
thrilled after knowing that this year’s
fair
is to be
organised
at my home. Last year, it was splendid and astonishing. Everything was well organized and synchronized
perfectly
, and
particularly
the plethora of cuisines displayed at the
fair
was awe-inspiring.
Moreover
, the ambience of the entire
fair
was glamorous and elegant.

Let
me
explain
about myself a bit. I am an
event
manager for the past 5 years and
hence
I have managed various college
events
and conference previously.
Furthermore
, I have
some
connections that could assist you in this
event
,
for instance
, there are a few disc jockeys in my contact who are
incredibly
talented and affordable.
Additionally
, if you have any issues with the decoration do
let
me know, I know
some
decorators and suppliers who can provide items required
efficiently
and at a low cost.
Also
, If there are any requirements to
be done
,
please
don’t hesitate to contact me.

Although the previous year's festival was astounding,
but
I had a few suggestions to upgrade the enthusiasm even more,
for example
, including a singing and dancing competition would be zealous.
In addition
to this,
even though
the variety of cuisine presented was amazing as the former festival,
but
adding a
live
kitchen would enhance the serving experience to another level.
Let
me know what you
think
of my
ideas
.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Thanking you

Yours
sincerely
,

Shakib
Qureshi
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some say that advertisements of toys and snacks have a huge impact on children and their parents and therefore advertising to children should be banned Give your own opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
263 words
7
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