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Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome the stress of everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome the stress of everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. v. 2
There has been a remarkable increase in the number of psychologists who believe that people ought to do nothing at all for a break time of the day in order to cope with stress. This essay will delve both sides of this view before drawing a reasonable conclusion. I definitely disagree with this idea because to do nothing might increase stress level due to feelings of asocialisation, alienation, and even depression. Admittedly, the negative implications of to do nothing are often discussed in terms of two key areas, which are creativity and productivity. Perhaps the main drawbacks of this advice is that employees’ creativity decrease, which in turn leads to mental problems, such as depression. According to a report published by the New York Times, creative works are the quickest way to get rid of negative energy and workplace stress in the Apple Company. Secondly, to do nothing at all for a period time affects not only creativity but also productivity. A good illustration of this is that workers who spend more time on resting are more predisposed to be less productive. Hence, both people and employers ought to be prudent because to spend a lot of time on break might increase stress level rather than decrease. Despite these arguments, the benefits of to do nothing at all for a period of time of the day should not be underestimated. The primary advantage of this is that there is a pronounced correlation between the amount of happiness hormones and break time. Therefore, when people give a break, their brains release either melatonin or serotonin. For instance, people who suffer from work stress could easily cope with negative energy through these hormones in a national bank. Thus, working without any break time might be perilous for people’s mental health. In conclusion, the decision as to whether which method is more useful in order to overcome stress must be taken in the context of entire psychologists. However, my personal view is that waiting without do anything can lead some psychological problems.
There has been a remarkable increase in the number of psychologists who believe that
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people
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nothing
at all for a
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break
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time
of the day in order to cope with
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stress
. This essay will delve both sides of this view
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before
drawing a reasonable conclusion. I definitely disagree with this
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idea
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because
to do
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nothing
might increase
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stress
level due to feelings of
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asocialisation
, alienation, and even depression.

Admittedly
, the
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negative
implications of to do
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nothing
are
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often
discussed in terms of two key areas, which are creativity and productivity. Perhaps the main drawbacks of this advice is that employees’ creativity decrease, which in turn leads to mental problems, such as depression. According to a report published by the New York
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Times
, creative works are the quickest way to
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get
rid of
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negative
energy and workplace
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stress
in the Apple
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Company
.
Secondly
, to do
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nothing
at all for a period
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time
affects not
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only
creativity
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but
also
productivity. A
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good
illustration of this is that workers who spend more
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time
on resting are more predisposed to be less productive.
Hence
, both
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people
and employers ought to be prudent
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because
to spend
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a lot of
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time
on
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break
might increase
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stress
level
rather
than decrease.

Despite these arguments, the benefits of to do
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nothing
at all for a period of
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time
of the day should not
be underestimated
. The primary advantage of this is that there is a pronounced correlation between the amount of happiness hormones and
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break
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time
.
Therefore
, when
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people
give a
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break
, their brains release either melatonin or serotonin.
For instance
,
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people
who suffer from work
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stress
could
easily
cope with
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negative
energy through these hormones in a national bank.
Thus
, working without any
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break
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time
might be perilous for
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people’s
mental health.

In conclusion
, the decision
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as to whether
which method is more useful in order to overcome
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stress
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must
be taken
in the context of entire psychologists.
However
, my personal view is that waiting without do anything can lead
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some
psychological problems.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome the stress of everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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