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Television sports shows such as Olympic are a good source of motivation for youths who do not like to exercise much To you agree or disagree v.3

Television sports shows such as Olympic are a good source of motivation for youths who do not like to exercise much To you agree or disagree v. 3
There has been a remarkable increase in the number of people who believe that TV sporting shows, such as the World Football Cup, the Wimbledon encourage the young people to exercise and sport. This essay will delve both sides of this view before drawing a reasonable conclusion. I definitely agree that these TV programs inspire the young people, specifically teenagers to exercise through famous sporters and great successfuls. Admittedly, the positive aspects of sporting shows on young people are often discussed in terms of two key areas, which are body conditions of famous athletes and competition feelings. Perhaps the main advantage of these shows is that young people might be encouraged to exercise in order to have exellent physical ability and masculen body. A good illustration of this is that according to a report published by the New York Times, there is a pronounced correlation between the number of teenagers who joined a sport club and time of the Olympics. Secondly, after decades of speculation, teenager psychologists now have fairly accurate information concerning teenagers’ competition feelings and TV sporting shows. Young people might be encouraged by sport programs to do regular exercise because teenagers believe that they can easily cope with complex issues thanks to do regular exercise. Hence, television programs might be useful in order to motivate the youth to exercise. Despite these arguments, drawbacks of TV sporting shows should not be underestimated by both parents and the governments. The primary disadvantage of this is that these programs can cause tension, which in turn leads to conflicts between young people who come from different countries. For instance, an Indian student killed his classmate due to a discuss, which stems from a national football match, in the last year. Furthermore, TV sporting programs can cause not only conflicts but also waste time. Young people spend on these programmes lots of their times rather than do exercise. Thus, authorities and parents should be prudent concerning perilous of TV sporting shows. In conclusion, the decision as to whether sporting shows motivate the youth exercise must be taken in the context of the entire society. However, my personal view is that these programs encourage the young people to do regular exercise and sport through televisions.
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people
who believe that TV sporting
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shows
, such as the World Football Cup, the Wimbledon encourage the
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young
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people
to
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exercise
and
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sport
. This essay will delve both sides of this view
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before
drawing a reasonable conclusion. I definitely
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agree
that these TV
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programs
inspire the
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young
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people
,
specifically
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teenagers
to
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exercise
through
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famous
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sporters
and great
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successfuls
.

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, the
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positive
aspects of sporting
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shows
on
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young
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people
are
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often
discussed in terms of two key areas, which are body conditions of
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famous
athletes and competition feelings. Perhaps the main advantage of these
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shows
is that
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young
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people
might
be encouraged
to
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exercise
in order to have
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exellent
physical ability and
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masculen
body. A
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good
illustration of this is that according to a report published by the New York
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Times
, there is a pronounced correlation between the number of
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teenagers
who
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joined
a
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sport
club and
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time
of the Olympics.
Secondly
, after decades of speculation,
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teenager
psychologists
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now
have
fairly
accurate information concerning
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teenagers’
competition feelings and TV sporting
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shows
.
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Young
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people
might
be encouraged
by
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sport
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programs
to do regular
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exercise
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because
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teenagers
believe that they can
easily
cope with complex issues thanks to do regular
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exercise
.
Hence
, television
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programs
might be useful in order to motivate the youth to exercise.

Despite these arguments, drawbacks of TV sporting
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shows
should not
be underestimated
by both parents and the
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governments
. The primary disadvantage of this is that these
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programs
can cause tension, which in turn leads to conflicts between
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young
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people
who
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come
from
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different
countries.
For instance
, an Indian student killed his classmate due to
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a discuss
, which stems from a national football match, in the last year.
Furthermore
, TV sporting
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programs
can cause not
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only
conflicts
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but
also
waste
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time
.
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Young
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people
spend on these
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programmes
lots of their
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rather
than do
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exercise
.
Thus
, authorities and parents should be prudent concerning perilous of TV sporting
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shows
.

In conclusion
, the decision
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as to whether
sporting
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shows
motivate the youth
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exercise
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must
be taken
in the context of the entire society.
However
, my personal view is that these
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programs
encourage the
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young
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people
to do regular
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exercise
and
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sport
through televisions.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Television sports shows such as Olympic are a good source of motivation for youths who do not like to exercise much To you agree or disagree v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
372 words
6.0
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