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Some psychologists say that doing absolutely nothing for a period of time each day is the key to decreasing stress in everyday life. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some psychologists say that doing absolutely nothing for a period of time each day is the key to decreasing stress in everyday life. v. 1
There has been a progressive rise in the number of people suffering from work related stress. Few psychologists state that an ideal way to combat stress is by spending adequate time relaxing. This essay will discuss reasons why I completely agree with the above-mentioned statement. To begin with, the world has become a competitive place. Everyone is busy in chasing their goals and desires. In order to achieve the desired results, people not only work long hours taking added job responsibilities to prove their efficiency, but they don’t even have their meals on time or even skip them which eventually has a detrimental impact on their health. For instance, studies have shown that such individuals are more prone to stress and other health issues as they have disorganized daily routine. Thus, it is imperative to act against such a routine. On the other hand, psychologists claim having a work linked stress is common these days. Apart from maintaining a balanced diet and exercising regularly one needs to distract himself from work and relax. Firstly, this brings the body and mind at peace and lowers the body’s blood pressure. For example, studies have proved that the hormone oxytocin is discharged within the body and is known to revitalize the body. In addition, such a break helps a person concentrate on his work in a more effective way. To conclude, work related stress is on the rise globally. I completely agree with the claim made by a few psychologists that taking time off from the regular routine is one of the ways to tackle such a scenario.
There has been a progressive rise in the number of
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people
suffering from
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work
related
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stress
. Few psychologists state that an ideal way to combat
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stress
is by spending adequate time relaxing. This essay will discuss reasons why I completely
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agree
with the above-mentioned statement.

To
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begin
with, the world has become a competitive place. Everyone is busy in chasing their goals and desires. In order to achieve the desired results,
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people
not
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only
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work
long hours taking
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added
job responsibilities to prove their efficiency,
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but
they don’t even have their meals on time or even skip them which
eventually
has a detrimental impact on their health.
For instance
, studies have shown that such individuals are more prone to
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stress
and other health issues as they have disorganized daily routine.
Thus
, it is imperative to act against such a routine.

On the other hand
, psychologists claim having a
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work
linked
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stress
is common these days. Apart from maintaining a balanced diet and exercising
regularly
one needs to distract himself from
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work
and relax.
Firstly
, this brings the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
and mind at peace and lowers the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body’s
blood pressure.
For example
, studies have proved that the hormone oxytocin
is discharged
within the
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body
and
is known
to revitalize the
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body
.
In addition
, such a break
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helps
a person concentrate on his
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work
in a more effective way.

To conclude
,
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work
related
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stress
is on the rise globally. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the claim made by a few psychologists that taking time off from the regular routine is one of the ways to tackle such a scenario.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some psychologists say that doing absolutely nothing for a period of time each day is the key to decreasing stress in everyday life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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