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The ownership of cars should be restricted to one per family in order to reduce traffic congestion and pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

The ownership of cars should be restricted to one per family in order to reduce traffic congestion and pollution. v. 2
Of late, the entrepreneurship of cars should be limited which is one per family for decrease the traffic jam and pollution. However, the vehicles and travellers re raising compared to past, due to the development of advanced technology. If these consequences may occurs some diseases also harmful for human' s health. Hence, it should be restricted. Admittedly, I completely agree with this concept. There are certain preventive measures to control the hiring of own cars and other vehicles. Firstly, the tax should be exalted and keep more rules and regulations under by government system. Moreover, most of the people they are chosen to use other transporting systems instead of using their own cars. As a result, in case of roads the traffic block and pollution may eradicate a little. Secondly, expenditure of fuel sources prizes should be increased. Subsequently, because of this is protect the public from pollution or other pollutants such as fogs and gases which are largely affected for their body. For instance, in Uttar Pradesh the petroleum prize is gradually topper rather than other materials, due to that nowadays the pollution becoming less on that area. Evidently, what makes the people protection from harmful environment, obviously the driving license test may keep some renovated techniques and dictums in order to ensure the road would be free from threats. Although, these menaces fosters the people get affected with some diseases such as respiratory tract infections and heart diseases. Furthermore, the accidents are arises which leads to death of the people sometimes major injuries as resulted. Thus, the society became low economic level and they are failure to achieve their notion. To be specific, recently one of the church priest passed away due to the road rush or accident indeed, the family is not getting proper as before so the government has given some financial help to such family. Having said that, not only the cars other four wheelers should be restricted which is one in each family. However, this paradigm may acts as a conscience for living life. Hence, the number of cars should be controlled for stagnating the circumstances.
Of late, the entrepreneurship of
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cars
should
be limited
which is one per family for decrease the traffic jam and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
.
However
, the vehicles and
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travellers
re raising compared to past, due to the development of advanced technology. If these consequences may occurs
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some
diseases
also
harmful for
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human&
#039; s health.
Hence
, it should
be restricted
.

Admittedly
, I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this concept. There are certain preventive measures to control the hiring of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
vehicles.
Firstly
, the tax should
be exalted
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations under by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
system.
Moreover
, most of the
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people
they
are chosen
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
transporting systems
instead
of using their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
.
As a result
, in case of roads the traffic block and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
may eradicate a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
.
Secondly
, expenditure of fuel sources prizes should
be increased
.
Subsequently
,
because of this
is
Consider using a past participle here: "protected".
protect
the public from
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pollution
or
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other
pollutants such as fogs and gases which are
largely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
for their body.
For instance
, in Uttar Pradesh the petroleum prize is
gradually
topper
rather
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
materials, due to that nowadays the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
becoming less on that area.

Evidently
, what
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the
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people
protection from harmful environment,
obviously
the driving license
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test
may
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keep
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
renovated techniques and
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dictums
in order to ensure the road would be free from threats. Although, these menaces fosters the
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
diseases such as respiratory tract infections and heart diseases.
Furthermore
, the accidents are arises which leads to death of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
major injuries as resulted.
Thus
, the society became low economic
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
level and
they are failure to achieve their notion. To be specific, recently one of the church priest passed away due to the road rush or accident
indeed
, the family is not getting proper as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
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so
the
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government
has
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given
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some
financial
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to such family.

Having said that, not
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only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
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other
four
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wheelers
should
be restricted
which is one in each family.
However
, this paradigm may acts as a conscience for living life.
Hence
, the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
should
be controlled
for stagnating the circumstances.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The ownership of cars should be restricted to one per family in order to reduce traffic congestion and pollution. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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