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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities. Others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities study together. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities. Others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities study together. v. 4
It is suggested that the academic abilities should be considered as a priority by the schools while choosing students. However, opponents agreed to select the students with different abilities to study together. This essay will ponder upon both views; before approaching down to any conclusion along with my hypothesis. On the one hand, people, who are in the favour or selecting students with academic skills, feel that it would be easy for teachers to deal with students according to their intellectual ability. For example, a student having an interest in a particular subject can boost the reputation of school, but only then when a school will come to know about his this ability. Hence it is justified, if school selects students on the behalf of their academic ability. On the other hand, the pupils having different abilities have their own advantages for the class. When schools will teach them together with other students, it will not only be beneficial for schools, but also prove to be helpful for other students because every child is unique and everyone is intelligent with his own way. Students can exchange skills when they learn with different learners. Such as, academic students may have subjective skills, but they can learn creativity by watching teachers teaching other students. In conclusion, although it is a controversy whether schools should choose students with good academics or differently abled. But I strongly believe that the combination of both will be advantageous for schools as well as students because they can interchange their best abilities with each other.
It
is suggested
that the
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academic
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abilities
should
be considered
as a priority by the
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schools
while choosing
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students
.
However
, opponents
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agreed
to select the
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students
with
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different
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abilities
to study together. This essay will ponder upon both views;
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before
approaching down to any conclusion along with my hypothesis.

On the one hand,
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people
, who are in the
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favour
or selecting
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students
with
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academic
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skills
, feel that it would be easy for teachers to deal with
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students
according to their intellectual
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ability
.
For example
, a
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student
having an interest in a particular subject can boost the reputation of
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school
,
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but
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only
then when a
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school
will
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come
to know about his this
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ability
.
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Hence
it
is justified
, if
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school
selects
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students
on the behalf of their
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academic
ability.

On the
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other
hand, the pupils having
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different
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abilities
have their
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own
advantages for the
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class
. When
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schools
will teach them together with
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other
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students
, it will not
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only
be beneficial for
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schools
,
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but
also
prove to be helpful for
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other
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students
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because
every child is unique and everyone is intelligent with his
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own
way.
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Students
can exchange
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skills
when they learn with
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different
learners. Such as,
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academic
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students
may have subjective
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skills
,
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but
they can learn creativity by watching teachers teaching
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other
students.

In conclusion
, although it is a controversy whether
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schools
should choose
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students
with
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good
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academics
or
differently
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abled
.
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But
I
strongly
believe that the combination of both will be advantageous for
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schools
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as well as
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students
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because
they can interchange their best
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abilities
with each
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other
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities. Others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities study together. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
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