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Some prefer to talk on phone, but others prefer to text. which manner of communication do you prefer? use specific reason to explain your opinion? v.2

Some prefer to talk on phone, but others prefer to text. which manner of communication do you prefer? use specific reason to explain your opinion? v. 2
The technology has grown fast that today communication is possible at any moment. Some interact through phone calls while others prefer texting information to others. In my opinion, communication through telephone or mobile phones are better than texting. This is due to the fact that accurate information can be passed on to others, less prone to make mistakes and makes it more formal. Interactions that are accurately and clearly conveyed makes a man more reliable. Most often while transmitting information to other people the facts must be precise and clearly stated otherwise would result in misinterpretation. Preferably, phone calls are less likely to provide false information because its a direct person-to-person speaking. For instance, while i was providing information regarding my graduation ceremony to my relatives i made a phone call to everyone. On the other hand, my friend just texted as a result there was a big confusion regarding the event in her house. Hence, phone calls are better option to communicate exact information to others. Choosing to call a person gives the importance of the message being communicated. Presumably, vital information is transmitted through phone calls and lesser valued ones a texted. Likewise, it also conveys that person on the other side is valued and ensures his significance. For instance, we do not text our professor instead make a call or write a mail to talk whereas i text my friend since its an informal conversation. Thus, the type of communication also implies the kind of message and the person being contacted. Finally, texting long messages are very exhausting and can become irritable. Typing in phone is not as easy as compared to typing with keyboard and mouse. The older generation will find it amusing and difficult to type in a phone than the present generation. Hence, as a matter of fact it gets annoying for older people since they are more prone to make mistakes and correction and the information will not be properly conveyed. To illustrate, my grandmother prefer phone calls to texting due the difficulty in vision and she makes errors while typing. Therefore, by an large phone calls are better way to spread news than texting. To conclude, information sharing can be formal or informal. Phone calls can ensure that message communicated is accurate and streamline rather than texting others.
The technology has grown
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fast
that
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today
communication is possible at any moment.
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Some
interact through
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phone
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calls
while others prefer texting
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information
to others. In my opinion, communication through telephone or mobile
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phones
are better than texting.
This is due to the fact that
accurate
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information
can
be passed
on to others, less prone to
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make
mistakes and
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makes
it more formal.

Interactions that are
accurately
and
clearly
conveyed
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makes
a
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man
more reliable. Most
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often
while transmitting
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information
to
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other
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people
the facts
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must
be precise and
clearly
stated
otherwise
would result in misinterpretation.
Preferably
,
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phone
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calls
are less likely to provide false
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information
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because
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its
a direct person-to-person speaking.
For instance
, while
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i
was providing
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information
regarding my graduation ceremony to my relatives
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i
made a
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phone
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call
to everyone. On the
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other
hand, my friend
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just
texted
as a result
there was a
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big
confusion regarding the
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event
in her
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house
.
Hence
,
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phone
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calls
are better option to communicate exact
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information
to others.

Choosing to
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call
a person gives the importance of the
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message
being communicated
. Presumably, vital
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information
is transmitted
through
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phone
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calls
and lesser valued ones a texted.
Likewise
, it
also
conveys that person on the
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other
side
is valued
and ensures his significance.
For instance
, we do not text our professor
instead
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make
a
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call
or write a mail to talk whereas
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
text my friend since its an informal conversation.
Thus
, the type of communication
also
implies the kind of
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message
and the person
being contacted
.

Finally
, texting long
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messages
are
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very
exhausting and can become irritable. Typing in
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phone
is not as easy as compared to typing with keyboard and mouse. The older generation will find it amusing and difficult to type in a
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phone
than the present generation.
Hence
, as a matter of fact it
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gets
annoying for older
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people
since they are more prone to
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make
mistakes and correction and the
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information
will not be
properly
conveyed. To illustrate, my grandmother prefer
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phone
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calls
to texting due the difficulty in
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
vision and
she
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makes
errors while typing.
Therefore
, by
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an
large
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phone
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calls
are
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better
way to spread news than texting.

To conclude
,
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information
sharing can be formal or informal.
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Phone
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calls
can ensure that
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message
communicated is accurate and streamline
rather
than texting others.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some prefer to talk on phone, but others prefer to text. which manner of communication do you prefer? use specific reason to explain your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
386 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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