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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. v. 2
Prison retribution has rapidly changed, due to that the lawlessness rate becomes less, and many criminal changes their lifestyle and helping in the community. However, others believe that the lawbreaker should devote the experienced of violation in the school, so students can be aware of doing the crime. I agree the statement of the former view, In this essay I will elaborate the first suffering can switch the mindset and the letter views prison retribution is developing the person's mindset of violation, and share the story of lawbreaking is how harmful for exercise. On the one hand, there are two reasons why people conceive that the corporal forfeiture should be at the highest priority on the agenda of the government because the offender may obey the laws and forget their criminal action. Moreover, we should give ex-offenders a chance of rehabilitation and teach them how to become useful members of society. Further and even more, Offended embark on their own career and even they assist with the police to reduce the case by sharing law breaking techniques. Also, a criminal makes a fresh living heart freely and even spent time with family or children. For instance, the online money hacking and cyber crime, mitigate, if the criminal give information regarding the connected criminal chain. . Lawbreaker can mitigate problems, if they release back to the society, they learn and give the importance of abiding rules. Since, the hackers working in their country, all the cyber crimes desolate. On the other hand, it is counter the claim that, school child becomes aware of a crime if the ex-prisoner guiding them and explain the full experience of ruin their career by doing offences. If the students know the offence commenting is damaging the movement and family member's soul about, so they do not think to law breakers. To exemplify, the illiterate students break the laws more than the educated students because they know regarding to the punishment. By way of conclusion, I conceive that, the prison can switch the offender into the best person and even they help to the police in reducing felony and guiding learners to do not doing criminal action because it's hazardous for their career.
Prison retribution has
rapidly
changed
, due to that the lawlessness rate becomes less, and
many
criminal
changes
their lifestyle and helping in the community.
However
, others believe that the lawbreaker should devote
the experienced of
violation in the school,
so
students
can be aware of doing the
crime
. I
agree
the statement of the former view, In this essay I will elaborate the
first
suffering can switch the mindset and the letter views prison retribution is developing the person's mindset of violation, and share the story of lawbreaking is how harmful for exercise.

On the one hand, there are two reasons why
people
conceive that the corporal forfeiture should be at the highest priority on the agenda of the
government
because
the offender may obey the
laws
and forget their
criminal
action.
Moreover
, we should give ex-offenders a chance of rehabilitation and teach them how to become useful members of society.
Further
and even more, Offended embark on their
own
career and even they assist with the police to
reduce
the case by sharing
law
breaking techniques.
Also
, a
criminal
makes
a fresh living heart
freely
and even spent time with family or children.
For instance
, the online money hacking and cyber
crime
, mitigate, if the
criminal
give information regarding the connected
criminal
chain.
.
Lawbreaker can mitigate problems, if they release back to the society, they learn and give the importance of abiding
rules
. Since, the hackers working in their country, all the cyber
crimes
desolate.

On the other hand
, it is counter the claim that, school child becomes aware of a
crime
if the ex-prisoner guiding them and
explain
the full experience of ruin their career by doing
offences
. If the
students
know the
offence
commenting is damaging the movement and family member's soul about,
so
they do not
think
to
law
breakers. To exemplify, the illiterate
students
break the
laws
more than the educated
students
because
they know
regarding to
the punishment.

By way of conclusion, I conceive that, the prison can switch the offender into the best person and even they
help
to the police in reducing felony and guiding learners to do not doing
criminal
action
because
it's hazardous for their career.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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