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Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a woman’s role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice v.5

Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a woman’s role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice v. 5
EQUALITY IN BETWEEN MAN AND WOMAN IS THE ONGOING HOLTY DEBATED TOPIC SINCE DECADES. FEW FOLKS ARGUE THAT ALL WOMEN SHOULG GET OPPORTUNITY TO GO HIGH IN THEIR CAREER. WHEREAS SOM VOCALIZE BY SAYING THAT WOMEN ARE MADE TO BE AT HOME FOR LOKING AFTER CHILDREN AND DWELL. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL STATE MY OPINION IN THE FAVORE OF EAQUAL CHANCE FOR FEMALES AS MALES AND SECONDLY, WHAT ARE THE VARIUOS BENEFITS THE SOCIETY COULD GET FROM A WORKING WOMEN. S ON THE ON HAND, THE MAJOR REASON IS THAT, FEMALE EMPLYOEE CONTRIBUTES IN UPSURGE THE ECONOMY OF THE CONTINENT. BECAUSE, WOMEN HAVE INBUILD MANAGEMENT QUALITY AND ALSO A ABILITY TO THINK FROM BOTH SIDE EMOTIONALLY AND PRACTICALLY. THEIR THIS POTENTIAL CAN BE AN ASSET TO EXPAND THE BUSINESS. SO, WHEN BUSINESS GROWS, AUTOMATICALLY IT WILL IMAPACT ON THE NATION'S ECONOMY BY OBATIING THE REVENUE. TAKE AMERICA AS EXAMPLE, WOMEN SOCIAL WORKER FIRM HAS DONE THE SURVEY AND DEPICTED THAT THE USA HAS JUST 10% OF HOUSE-WIFES WHO TAKEING CARE OF THE FAMILY AND JUVENILES. THUS, THE USA CONSIDERED AS A HIGHLY ECONOMICAL COUNTRY. NONETHELESS, THEY DO OT HAVE ENOGH PHYSICAL STRENGTH TO WORK CONSTANTLY. ON THE OTHER HAND, WOMES INDEED PLAYS A CRUCIAL ROLE IN CHILD UPBRINGING. WHEN MOTHER OF A CHILD STOPS LOKKING AFTER HIM, THEN THAT OFSPRING DO NOT DEVELOP THE UNDERSTANDING OF THE RELATION AND MIGHT GROW UP AS UNUSEFUL MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY. AS JUVENILES USED TO BE MORE CLOSE WITH THEIR MON THAN ANY OTHER FAMILY MEMBER. FOR AN EXAMPLE, DAUGHTER OF OUR ONE OF THE NEIGHBOUR IS SPOILED CHILD, AS SHE DOES NOT KNOW THE BASIC MANNERS LIKE HOW TO BEHIEVE AND SPEAK WITH ELDERS. THIS IS BECAUSE OF HER WORKING MOTHER. HENCE, IT IS ALSO IMMPORTANT FOR FEMLAE TO KEEP UPDATE WITH FAMILY AND CHILDREN. IN CONCLUSION, IT IS THE FACT THAT SOME WOMEN HAVE EXCELLENT MANAGEMENT SKILLS WHERE, THEY ARE ABLE TO CO-OP WITH BOTH LIVES PROFESSIONALLY AS WELL AS PERSONALLY. AND NOWADAYS MENS ARE ALSO CONTRIBUTING THEIR ROLE IN FAMILY AS EQUAL TO WOMEN. THUS, I BELIEVE FOR EVERYONES BENEFITS, WOMEN SHOULD ALLOWED TO OPT FOR JOB AND CAREERS ENDOVEROURS.
EQUALITY IN BETWEEN
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MAN
AND WOMAN IS THE ONGOING
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HOLTY
DEBATED TOPIC SINCE DECADES. FEW FOLKS ARGUE THAT ALL
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WOMEN
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SHOULG
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GET
OPPORTUNITY TO GO HIGH IN THEIR CAREER. WHEREAS
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SOM
VOCALIZE BY SAYING THAT
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WOMEN
ARE MADE
TO BE AT HOME FOR
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LOKING
AFTER CHILDREN AND DWELL.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL STATE MY OPINION IN THE
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FAVORE
OF
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EAQUAL
CHANCE FOR FEMALES AS MALES AND
SECONDLY
, WHAT ARE THE
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VARIUOS
BENEFITS THE SOCIETY COULD
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GET
FROM A WORKING
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WOMEN
. S

ON THE ON HAND, THE MAJOR REASON IS THAT, FEMALE
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EMPLYOEE
CONTRIBUTES IN UPSURGE THE ECONOMY OF THE CONTINENT.
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BECAUSE
,
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WOMEN
HAVE
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INBUILD
MANAGEMENT QUALITY AND
ALSO
A ABILITY TO
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THINK
FROM BOTH SIDE
EMOTIONALLY
AND
PRACTICALLY
. THEIR THIS POTENTIAL CAN BE AN ASSET TO EXPAND THE BUSINESS.
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SO
, WHEN BUSINESS GROWS,
AUTOMATICALLY
IT WILL
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IMAPACT
ON THE NATION'S ECONOMY BY
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OBATIING
THE REVENUE. TAKE AMERICA AS EXAMPLE,
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WOMEN
SOCIAL WORKER FIRM HAS DONE THE SURVEY AND DEPICTED THAT THE USA HAS
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JUST
10% OF
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HOUSE-WIFES
WHO
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TAKEING
CARE OF THE
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FAMILY
AND JUVENILES.
THUS
, THE USA CONSIDERED AS A
HIGHLY
ECONOMICAL COUNTRY. NONETHELESS, THEY DO OT HAVE
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ENOGH
PHYSICAL STRENGTH TO WORK
CONSTANTLY
.

ON THE OTHER HAND
,
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WOMES
INDEED
PLAYS A CRUCIAL ROLE IN CHILD UPBRINGING. WHEN MOTHER OF A CHILD
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STOPS
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LOKKING
AFTER HIM, THEN THAT
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OFSPRING
DO NOT DEVELOP THE UNDERSTANDING OF THE RELATION AND MIGHT GROW UP AS UNUSEFUL MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY. AS JUVENILES
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USED
TO BE MORE CLOSE WITH THEIR MON THAN ANY OTHER
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FAMILY
MEMBER. FOR AN EXAMPLE, DAUGHTER OF OUR ONE OF THE
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NEIGHBOUR
IS SPOILED
CHILD, AS SHE DOES NOT KNOW THE BASIC MANNERS LIKE HOW TO
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BEHIEVE
AND SPEAK WITH ELDERS. THIS IS
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BECAUSE
OF HER WORKING MOTHER.
HENCE
, IT IS
ALSO
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IMMPORTANT
FOR
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FEMLAE
TO
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KEEP
UPDATE WITH
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FAMILY
AND CHILDREN.

IN CONCLUSION
, IT IS THE FACT THAT
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SOME
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WOMEN
HAVE EXCELLENT MANAGEMENT
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SKILLS
WHERE, THEY ARE ABLE TO CO-OP WITH BOTH
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LIVES
PROFESSIONALLY
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AS WELL AS
PERSONALLY
. AND NOWADAYS
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MENS
ARE
ALSO
CONTRIBUTING THEIR ROLE IN
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FAMILY
AS EQUAL TO
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WOMEN
.
THUS
, I BELIEVE FOR
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EVERYONES
BENEFITS,
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WOMEN
SHOULD
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ALLOWED
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TO OPT
FOR JOB AND CAREERS
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ENDOVEROURS
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a woman’s role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice v. 5

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
360 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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