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Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. v. 2
Nowadays, a group of people, argue that spending period on watching movies is not going to have a value for the time and some group opposes this, saying that watching the film is not a waste of seconds. In my opinion, watching the screen is not spoiling the time and I encourage the individuals to see. The following essay state points to support my opinion. Firstly, in recent years, so many varieties of screens such as, comedy, emotions, and the fights are there in the country. Citizens can choose which one they have to watch depends on their mood and the interest. They are taking film as a period of getting relaxation from their busy work-life schedule. For instance, India has more than 10 theatres in one region and can offer all types of screen to the audience. After the movie, most of the viewer's are feeling relaxed. An increasing number of cinemas are an example of arguing, that the people are not taking it as an unwanted time. Secondly, we can observe that most of the movies are realistic and are directly taken from the society. After watching the act, sometimes we get a real idea what actually happened in our country and how we can be caution in the future. For example, in Kerala, one screen with a name Virus was released, which is directly written from the incident happened in Kerala. One virus attacked Kerala and it triggered a contagious disease. The film was exactly the same. By seeing this, we can say that screens actually helps us to understand the situations. In conclusion, in my observation, spending day to watch a movie is not a waste of period as most of the movies have influences of the society and they act as good media to get the relaxation.
Nowadays, a group of
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people
,
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argue
that spending period on watching
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movies
is not going to have a value for the time and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
group opposes this, saying that watching the film is not a waste of seconds. In my opinion, watching the
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screen
is not spoiling the time and I encourage the individuals to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
. The following essay state points to support my opinion.

Firstly
, in recent years,
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so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
varieties of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
screens
such as, comedy, emotions, and the fights are there in the country. Citizens can choose which one they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
depends on their mood and the interest. They are taking film as a period of getting relaxation from their busy work-life schedule.
For instance
, India has more than 10
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theatres
in one region and can offer all types of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
screen
to the audience. After the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
, most of the
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viewer's
are feeling relaxed. An increasing number of cinemas are an example of arguing, that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are not taking it as an unwanted time.

Secondly
, we can observe that most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
are realistic and are
directly
taken from the society. After watching the act,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a real
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
what actually happened in our country and how we can be caution in the future.
For example
, in Kerala, one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
screen
with a name Virus
was released
, which is
directly
written from the incident happened in Kerala. One virus attacked Kerala and it triggered a contagious disease. The film was exactly the same. By seeing this, we can say that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
screens
actually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us to understand the situations.

In conclusion
, in my observation, spending day to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
is not a waste of period as most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
have influences of the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
society and
they act as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
media to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the relaxation.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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