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Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. v. 1
It is individual’s choice that which mode of hobby he/she likes to pursue in thier spare time. While some people believe that watching film is waste of time, I agree with those who argue that it has certain benefits too. To begin with, an average movie consumed atleast 2 hours time, and in modern day life, people often do not have enough time to spend on them. The reason for this is that they have other major things to do such as managing office work and taking care of family members. So, where time is a crucial commodity, people want to spent it wisely and consider movies as waste of time. Instead of going for picture, busy people often go for walk or do yoga which is healthier alternative and also takes less toll on their schedule. However, I feel that movies are most effective way of getting brake from routine life. This is because it allows spectators to dwell in a realm of fantasy. Moreover, it is also means of getting socialized as people often go for movie with friends and family. And top of it, some motivational movies which are based on some real life events inspire people to chase their dream. For instance, “Dangal” film is a story of a woman wrestler who hails from remote village and rises to win an international competition. In conclusion, although watching movie may be a time consuming task, I feel that the pros like time off from routine, good option for socializing and a source of motivation make movies worth watching.
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often
do not have
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to spend on them.
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spent
it
wisely
and consider
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as waste of
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of going for picture, busy
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people
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go for walk or do yoga which is healthier alternative and
also
takes less toll on their schedule.

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, I feel that
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effective way of getting brake from routine life. This is
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with friends and family. And top of it,
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motivational
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movies
which
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on
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real life
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inspire
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people
to chase their dream.
For instance
, “
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Dangal
” film is a story of a woman wrestler who hails from remote village and rises to win an international competition.

In conclusion
, although watching
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may be a
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time consuming
task, I feel that the pros like
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off from routine,
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good
option for socializing and a source of motivation
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make
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movies
worth watching.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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