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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary to universities, too much spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary to universities, too much spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Agree or disagree? v. 1
The mother tongue is certainly the most important for any person; however, in order to get ahead in life and career it has now imperative for a person to speak at least one foreign language. Hence, I agree with the given argument. There are multiple benefits to speaking a foreign accent. These days more and more people are travelling to different countries to explore foreign culture, arts, food and other aspects of life. Travelling becomes a whole lot easier if they speak at least one foreign word. When travellers know the language of the country they travel in, they can easily interact with local people and build a healthy rapport with them. This makes travelling more enjoyable and even improves relation between countries. Likewise, it is important for students pursuing higher education abroad to speak at least one foreign language. Most foreign universities require international applicants to be fluent in a language like English. Being bilingual or multilingual also benefits the academic progress of students by helping them learn concepts faster. In addition, it helps them make friends abroad and thus overcome homesickness. Proficiency in a foreign language also improves the career prospects of students. Employers, especially multinational corporations, give preference to candidates capable of speaking two or more international languages. These conglomerations have business interests all over the world and they want their staff to be able to converse with their counterparts working in other countries. In conclusion, in this age of globalization, it has become absolutely necessary for people to acquire proficiency in at least one foreign language if they want to prosper in their career. Learning a foreign language is also a great way to learn about a foreign culture and its people.
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certainly
the most
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important
for any person;
however
, in order to
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get
ahead in life and career it has
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now
imperative for a person to speak at least one
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foreign
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language
.
Hence
, I
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agree
with the
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given
argument.

There are multiple benefits to speaking a
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foreign
accent. These days more and more
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people
are travelling to
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different
countries to explore
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foreign
culture, arts, food and other aspects of life. Travelling becomes a
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whole lot
easier if they speak at least one
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foreign
word. When
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travellers
know the
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language
of the country they travel in, they can
easily
interact with local
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people
and build a healthy rapport with them. This
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makes
travelling more enjoyable and even
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improves
relation between countries.

Likewise
, it is
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important
for students pursuing higher education abroad to speak at least one
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foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
. Most
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foreign
universities require international applicants to be fluent in a
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language
like English. Being bilingual or multilingual
also
benefits the academic progress of students by helping them learn concepts faster.
In addition
, it
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helps
them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
friends abroad and
thus
overcome homesickness.

Proficiency in a
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foreign
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language
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
the career prospects of students. Employers,
especially
multinational corporations, give preference to candidates capable of speaking two or more international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
languages
. These conglomerations have business interests all over the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
world and
they want their staff to be able to converse with their counterparts working in other countries.

In conclusion
, in this age of globalization, it has become
absolutely
necessary for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to acquire proficiency in at least one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
if they want to prosper in their career. Learning a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
is
also
a great way to learn about a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
culture and its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary to universities, too much spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Agree or disagree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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