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Describe an ideal marriage partner. What qualities do you think are most important for a husband or wife? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.3

Describe an ideal marriage partner. What qualities do you think are most important for a husband or wife? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 3
The development of internet connection is rapidly increasing in many countries over the world. This can be seen in daily shopping demands that were even performed at home. To support this, It is agreed that internet shopping will lead to close all shops in Cities and towns. This essay will be shown by looking at how traditional shopping may be fading away by satisfaction of unique shopping providing by online site and lower overhead cost. To begin with, vital reason for closure the physical stores in the future is that consumers are quite satisfied with a unique shopping experience provided by online sites. This is because they have a wide variety of shopping options to choose from, coupled with fast and reliable delivery channels which makes most of the customers prefer e-commerce to traditional stores. For example, recently, the orders of Amazone online shopping have committed for delivery to clients with 10 business working days and provided refund policy on damage goods within 7 days of receipt. Consequently, these conveniences give a high possibility of retail stores will eventually perish Another compelling argument that the e-commerce giants will succeed over retail shops is that they have a larger capital base and lower overhead payment. For example, the Ebay company has deployed many enormous marketing programs of faster delivery by drones, which would decrease the manpower charge and time. As a result, effective management that makes these online shopping companies expand their business significantly, thus lead to eliminate the traditional stores In conclusion, services on the site have given the pleasures and delight to their customers and the effects will quickly develop this kind of business model. It is agreed that e-commerce services will thus replace the existing old shops
The development of internet connection is
rapidly
increasing in
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many
countries over the world. This can be
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seen
in daily
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shopping
demands that were even performed at home. To support this, It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
that internet
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shopping
will lead to close all shops in Cities and towns. This essay will
be shown
by looking at how traditional
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shopping
may be fading away by satisfaction of unique
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shopping
providing by
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online
site and lower overhead cost.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, vital reason for closure the physical stores in the future is that consumers are quite satisfied with a unique
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shopping
experience provided by
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online
sites. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they have a wide variety of
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shopping
options to choose from, coupled with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
and reliable delivery channels which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
most of the customers prefer e-commerce to traditional stores.
For example
, recently, the orders of
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Amazone
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
have committed for delivery to clients with 10 business working days and provided refund policy on damage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
within 7 days of receipt.
Consequently
, these conveniences give a high possibility of retail stores will
eventually
perish

Another compelling argument that the e-commerce giants will succeed over retail shops is that they have a larger capital base and lower overhead payment.
For example
, the
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Ebay
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company
has deployed
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many
enormous marketing programs of faster delivery by drones, which would decrease the manpower charge and time.
As a result
, effective management that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
these
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
expand their business
significantly
,
thus
lead to eliminate the traditional stores

In conclusion
, services on the site have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the pleasures and delight to their customers and the effects will
quickly
develop this kind of business model. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
that e-commerce services will
thus
replace the existing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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shops
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe an ideal marriage partner. What qualities do you think are most important for a husband or wife? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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