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Some people think the governments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve the environments problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think the governments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve the environments problems. v. 1
These days, there is an ongoing discussion between people about the potential benefits to the environment when fuel emissions were reduced. While some people suggest the authorities to raise gas costs, in order to address this issue, it may not be practical considering the broader scenario. Hence, I completely do not agree with this approach. In this essay, I shall explain the reasons behind my disagreement with the given statement, and provide examples as required. To begin with, transportation fuels are an essential commodity that supports most segments of the daily necessities in the modern human life, such as to produce and transport food. Fundamentally, if their prices go up, it will funnel down into almost all aspects of the human support system. As such, food prices may skyrocket and become inaccessible to the poor and needy. Next, harmony in the society could get disturbed, leading to increased crime. In Somalia, for example, when the local governing body imposed 200 percentage taxes on petrol, the country experienced significant inflation overnight and almost collapsed the local economy. Moving further, the environment, on the other hand, is going through a lot of change nowadays. The climate change is clearly visible; as such, the global temperatures are clearly going up every year, and the icebergs are melting rapidly. Considering these factors, it is therefore, important to safeguard our planet. So, rather than hiking the fuel costs, it would be ideal to develop alternate solutions to move vehicles. Tesla, for instance, is a great example, it runs on electricity and is carbon neutral. In conclusion, it is our duty to protect our surroundings, however, not at the cost of human existence. For this reason, I totally disagree with the given statement and recommend the government to fund research into developing alternative fuels.
These days, there is an ongoing discussion between
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people
about the potential benefits to the environment when
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fuel
emissions were
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reduced
. While
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some
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people
suggest the authorities to raise gas costs, in order to address this issue, it may not be practical considering the broader scenario.
Hence
, I completely do not
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agree
with this approach. In this essay, I shall
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explain
the reasons behind my disagreement with the
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given
statement, and provide examples as required.

To
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begin
with, transportation
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fuels
are an essential commodity that supports most segments of the daily necessities in the modern human life, such as to produce and transport food.
Fundamentally
, if their prices go up, it will funnel down into almost all aspects of the human support system. As such, food prices may skyrocket and become inaccessible to the poor and needy.
Next
, harmony in the society could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
disturbed, leading to increased crime. In Somalia,
for example
, when the local governing body imposed 200 percentage taxes on petrol, the country experienced significant inflation overnight and almost collapsed the local economy.

Moving
further
, the environment,
on the other hand
, is going through
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a lot of
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change
nowadays. The climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
is
clearly
visible; as such, the global temperatures are
clearly
going up every year, and the icebergs are melting
rapidly
. Considering these factors, it is
therefore
,
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important
to safeguard our planet.
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So
,
rather
than hiking the
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fuel
costs, it would be ideal to develop alternate solutions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
vehicles. Tesla,
for instance
, is a great example, it runs on electricity and is carbon neutral.

In conclusion
, it is our duty to protect our surroundings,
however
, not at the cost of human existence.
For this reason
, I
totally
disagree with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
statement and recommend the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to fund research into developing alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think the governments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve the environments problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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