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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.10

Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. v. 10
In recent years, cheap air flights are taking the world by storm, getting increasingly well-known among tourists and travellers. However, some believe that cheap air fares should be encouraged to grant ordinary people an opportunity to travel, others think that it creates a part of environmental issues and causes a lot more dramatic problems. On the one hand, there is an assortment of reasons why low-budget flights ought to be greatly encouraged. It has broadened travel possibilities for many people, particularly for the lower income group, which also has enabled them to travel to distant destinations that they otherwise might have never gone by. Hence, people individuals have the chances to learn from different cultures and have a better understanding of nations they used to be unfamiliar with. Furthermore, travels also help promote the tourist industry development, which conceivably take it to the next level. Globally, more job opportunities will be created, more goods will be traded among nations, benefiting the whole industry when more visitors arrive. On the contrary, economic flying may also be the factor in the environmental issues and other problems. The frequency of flights to destinations is very high, and so does the level of co2 emissions being released into the environment, which contributes to the climate change. If these cheap tickets are uncontrollable, the environmental impacts would only get worse in the long run. Besides, sometimes those tickets are extremely annoying with regard to certain conditions that go along with them. For example, passengers are unable to change the date and time once purchased in emergency cases if they want to reschedule To put it in a nutshell, the benefits cheap air flights bring outweigh the drawbacks, but it does not mean that the government should ignore those consequential issues. Scientists should find a solution to reduce emissions from aeroplanes and the services related to it should be enhanced to better meet everyone's needs.
In recent years,
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cheap
air
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flights
are taking the world by storm, getting
increasingly
well-known among tourists and
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travellers
.
However
,
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some
believe that
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cheap
air fares should
be encouraged
to grant ordinary
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
an opportunity to
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travel
, others
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think
that it creates a part of environmental issues and causes a lot more dramatic problems.

On the one hand, there is an assortment of reasons why low-budget
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flights
ought to be
greatly
encouraged. It has broadened
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
possibilities for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
particularly
for the lower income group, which
also
has enabled them to
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travel
to distant destinations that they
otherwise
might have never gone by.
Hence
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
individuals have the chances to learn from
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different
cultures and have a better understanding of nations they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be unfamiliar with.
Furthermore
,
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travels
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
promote the tourist industry development, which
conceivably
take it to the
next
level. Globally, more job opportunities will
be created
, more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
will
be traded
among nations, benefiting the whole industry when more visitors arrive.

On the contrary
, economic flying may
also
be the factor in the environmental issues and other problems. The frequency of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flights
to destinations is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
does the level of co2 emissions
being released
into the environment, which contributes to the climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
. If these
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cheap
tickets are uncontrollable, the environmental impacts would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
worse in the long run.
Besides
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
those tickets are
extremely
annoying with regard to certain conditions that go along with them.
For example
, passengers are unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the date and time once
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
in emergency cases if they want to reschedule

To put it in a nutshell, the benefits
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cheap
air
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flights
bring outweigh the drawbacks,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it does not mean that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
those consequential issues. Scientists should find a solution to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
emissions from
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aeroplanes
and the services related to it should
be enhanced
to better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
everyone's needs.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. v. 10

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
319 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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