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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.8

Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. v. 8
It is true that the flourishing of aviation has been attributed to technological advancements and fast-paced globalization, which lead to the fact that many airlines are attracting passengers by providing an array of economy flights. While some people assume that the cheap wind flight comes as a threat to the environment, I tend towards the viewpoint that this is a great reservoir of chances to fulfil satisfactions of cost-effective travelling and relaxing for the public. I will discuss both views in detail in this following essay and my approval opinion will be proven clearly. On the one hand, many assume that the economy class flights should be under prohibition due to the fact that it poses a threat to the environment. It is prevalently known that airplane consumes a vast amount of fuel and gas emission associated with the excessive of flights every day, which can expose into the atmosphere lots of polluted substance. Pollutants from the aeroplane in the breath mixed with the cars emitted particles can represent a potential risk to citizen's health. A stark example of this case is people who live in airport areas can easily have respiratory problems such as cough, lung, or even cancer. On the other hand, cheap breeze travel is of paramount importance in skyrocketing the tourism industry. On the societal level, these cheap flights bring the same freedom of getting away from it all. Earlier, taking a flight to move is a luxurious dream to the public, but now, these flights can be accessed easily by middle-class people who even have a modest budget. This is a beneficial way that provides those with opportunities to take a charter-flight, to go for business, or to embark on the holiday journey. Consequently, not only do wind-commuters can gain chances to travel on business but they also have tranquility, which is the best remedy to stay away from the hustle and bustle to recharge their battery for the next life-paced living. In addition, personally, the students will be receiving a myriad of chances for intercultural exchange activities. This is particularly the case for those who take part in the abroad, volunteer work or join some youth forums. In conclusion, it seems to me that it be unnecessary to take cheap air flights into prohibition as long as the public becomes more aware of redundant flights and decrease those.
It is true that the flourishing of aviation has
been attributed
to technological advancements and
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fast
-paced globalization, which lead to the fact that
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many
airlines are attracting passengers by providing an array of economy
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flights
. While
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
assume that the
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cheap
wind
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flight
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
as a threat to the environment, I tend towards the viewpoint that this is a great reservoir of chances to fulfil satisfactions of cost-effective travelling and relaxing for the public. I will discuss both views in detail in this following essay and my approval opinion will
be proven
clearly
.

On the one hand,
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many
assume that the economy
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class
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flights
should be under prohibition due to the fact that it poses a threat to the environment. It is
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prevalently
known that airplane consumes a vast amount of fuel and gas emission associated with
The phrase 'the excessive of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the excessive of
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flights
every day, which can expose into the atmosphere lots of polluted substance. Pollutants from the
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aeroplane
in the breath mixed with the cars emitted particles can represent a potential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
to citizen's health. A stark example of this case is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in airport areas can
easily
have respiratory problems such as cough, lung, or even cancer.

On the other hand
,
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cheap
breeze travel is of paramount importance in skyrocketing the tourism industry. On the societal level, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cheap
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flights
bring the same freedom of getting away from it all. Earlier, taking a
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flight
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
is a luxurious dream to the public,
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but
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now
, these
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flights
can
be accessed
easily
by middle-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who even have a modest budget. This is a beneficial way that provides those with opportunities to take a charter-flight, to go for business, or to embark on the holiday journey.
Consequently
, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
do wind-commuters can gain chances to travel on business
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but
they
also
have tranquility, which is the best remedy to stay away from the hustle and bustle to recharge their battery for the
next
life-paced living.
In addition
,
personally
, the students will be receiving a myriad of chances for intercultural exchange activities. This is
particularly
the case for those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in the abroad, volunteer work or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
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some
youth forums.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that it be unnecessary to take
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cheap
air
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flights
into prohibition as long as the public becomes more aware of redundant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flights
and decrease those.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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